Humans are social beings who benefit from having a relationship with others. Friends play and essential role in our lives. One of the most important things people want in life is that to spend time with a person with whom they feel comfortable and consider a real friend. Some people think it is important to make new friends than keep in touch with old friends. Some people seek new friends in order to have new experiences. In my opinion, keeping old friends is more important than making new friends. Old friends cannot be replaced with new friends, they are reliable and understand our lives so well.
First of all, old friends are very important because they have shared experiences and memories with us. Our old friends have known us for many years and time has proven that the relationship with our old friends is real. Old friends are reliable and are the ones whom we can trust. I am sure that everyone wants to have someone who they can trust and share their personal feeling with when they are going through difficult time. I remember when I lost my grandfather, I was living away from my family. I was alone and very depressed; however, one of my old friends drove about five hours to stay with me during the weekend and helped me feel better. I have found that my old friends always have my back. Every time I have problems in my life, my old friends are the ones who always support me and are with me. I have not gone through difficult times alone. Relationships with my old friends are real and are important and I do not want to lose them.
The second reason why keeping old friends is more important than making new friends is that old friends are the ones who understand us the most. Though new friends may introduce you to new activities and give you different experiences, it is important to take the time to get to know them well. A good relationship takes time to grow and it cannot happen overnight. Therefore, being surrounded with people who understand you is essential. Your old friends have known you for years, so they know what you like and dislike, they can see value in you, and they know how to approach you in an appropriate way when you need it. Also it is more fun to spend time with friends who understand you and are willing to support you in your personal goal. Your old friends understand you and can anticipate what you want without you having to say anything.
In conclusion, though there are advantages to making new friends, there is no doubt that old friends cannot be replaced with new friends. Relationships with old friends are real and reliable. It is important to keep in touch with old friends with whom you feel comfortable. Old friends know our life and understand us very well.
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Essay evaluation report
One of the most important things people want in life is that to spend time
One of the most important things people want in life is to spend time
to have someone who they can trust
to have someone whom they can trust
flaws:
No. of Words: 492 while No. of Different Words: 187 //it means it has a lot of duplicated content. for example, in the third paragraph, you try to put a lot of things for one reason. For TOEFL essays, one paragraph is for one thing. Try this pattern in 5 paragraphs and 3 reasons:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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3. Don't need to put a lot of content for one reason. We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2194 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.459 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.36 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.393 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.266 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ther, I was living away from my family. I was alone and very depressed; however, ...
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Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the weekend and helped me feel better. I have found that my old friends always h...
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Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...rrounded with people who understand you is essential. Your old friends have known ...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... you, and they know how to approach you in an appropriate way when you need it. Also it is more fun t...
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Line 5, column 624, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...in an appropriate way when you need it. Also it is more fun to spend time with frien...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'in conclusion', 'no doubt', 'first of all', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.175046554935 0.229887763892 76% => OK
Verbs: 0.2104283054 0.158761421928 133% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10800744879 0.0866891130778 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0521415270019 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.122905027933 0.0685040099705 179% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.096834264432 0.118717715034 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0353817504655 0.0351676179071 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43618398293 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0316573556797 0.0309702414327 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0335195530726 0.0887237588012 38% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148975791434 0.0209618222197 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0297951582868 0.0139019557991 214% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2737.0 2387.08602151 115% => OK
No of words: 492.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56300813008 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.276422764228 0.338922669872 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.209349593496 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126016260163 0.174417080927 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0853658536585 0.112833075102 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43618398293 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400406504065 0.524397521467 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.0058202871 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5714285714 20.5533526081 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3453785082 48.84282405 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.75 120.699889404 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.5533526081 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.464285714286 0.644075263715 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 38.506387921 45.7405998639 84% => OK
Elegance: 0.797101449275 1.45489161554 55% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438689798668 0.300154397459 146% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.150970910193 0.103427244359 146% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101830875825 0.0752933317313 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.49746796742 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149868562394 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169652504603 0.114077575197 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110856986776 0.0781384742642 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.431372593109 0.336927656856 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.065498552126 0.067059652881 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343751034982 0.210909579961 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090228348548 0.0618886996521 146% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8870967742 219% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 24.0 8.42114695341 285% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 26.0 13.6433691756 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.