If you count your blessings time is one of the most precious asset you have. Its true that today's technological advancement and fastened life styles has freed human being from searching for the basic livelihoods. Rather people can enjoy their time in many ways today. But it still remains a personal choice how you choose to expense your leisure time. And from the observations surrounding me I do agree people today are spending more time on personal entertainment instead of fruitful activities.
First children are spending more time out side of their studies in video games, social network etc which has significant effect on their psychology as well. The increasing g population has made the world more competitive and left us with smaller spaces. As a result children today are being more dependent on technological entertainment and left behind in their study goals. For example, I used to do different extracurricular activity like attending science fair and making interesting projects for the show. Whereas my nephew studying in standard 3 in a well-known school is unaware of this kind of activity organized by the school. However, his free time is invested heavily in high end video games which even causing him juvenile eye problems. Moreover, this introvert arrangement of entertainment made him socially detached Hench I have seen him playing games on mobile phone in almost any social gathering. This is not expected from today's educated families where related information and remedy is so available. rather children should be involved in more meaningful activity related to their studies like parents can show their children small science tricks to inspire them in STEM area and put a collection of child literature books always near their disposal. Furthermore, to make them more connected to the family, children need to be appreciated with full extend during the family gathering.
Secondly, adults are also not far behind in terms of attending unimportant parties. It has been culture now a day for especially young generation to celebrate meaningless events with the joy of loud music and extended use of substances. The fully enjoyed loudness here causes serious problem to the neighbors and impact the overall social norms. Very recently in my neighborhood, in the name of bachelor party few young guys run the music loud for the whole night. As a result, a sleepless night caused me to miss an important meeting next morning. There may be other students in my building who may have had exam on the next day. I would suggest instead of wasting time with these audible frequencies (I actually deter to call them music), a group tour inside the nature of hiking a mountain will be far more refreshing and helpful to achieve real friendship.
In conclusion both the children and adults are wasting their times in many ways. In fact, people carrying these behaviors from their early age to adulthood. And if we continue this way once there will be none left around you to show you the greater meaning of life. So its better to revive ourselves early and concentrate our efforts towards more influential aspects of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If you count your blessings time is one of...
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Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...om searching for the basic livelihoods. Rather people can enjoy their time in many way...
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Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
... First children are spending more time out side of their studies in video games, social...
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Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...king interesting projects for the show. Whereas my nephew studying in standard 3 in a w...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rather
...information and remedy is so available. rather children should be involved in more mea...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: rather,
...information and remedy is so available. rather children should be involved in more mea...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'whereas', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251346499102 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.159784560144 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114901256732 0.0866891130778 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.064631956912 0.046263068375 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0736086175943 0.0685040099705 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113105924596 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0592459605027 0.0351676179071 168% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73107731198 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0269299820467 0.0309702414327 87% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0682226211849 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0143626570916 0.0209618222197 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107719928187 0.0139019557991 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3146.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 520.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363461538462 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.273076923077 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194230769231 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115384615385 0.112833075102 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73107731198 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 212.727598566 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598076923077 0.524397521467 114% => OK
Word variations: 79.1706612907 59.2087087015 134% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0226710018 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.644075263715 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 47.3076923077 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.42168674699 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100478255403 0.300154397459 33% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0656894860218 0.103427244359 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.045270251672 0.0752933317313 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.399287387248 0.497263757937 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.102118761355 0.151897553556 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372394249766 0.114077575197 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412687394593 0.0781384742642 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.303709177504 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0316710730054 0.067059652881 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778961144059 0.210909579961 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459764078793 0.0618886996521 74% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.