Education is one of the most important aspect of each person’s life. It plays a key role in the future life due to modern parents pay much more attention to the education than parents in the past. They utilize various approaches in order their children become more interested in learning education materials. One of these methods that some parents believe that can be workable in learning process, is allocating some money as a reward when their children get high grade. However, there are some parents that disagree with this idea. They hold that in this way, children will just concentrate on money not education. From my point of view, I am inclined to support the former opinion. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason to be mentioned is that students who receive rewards from their parents will have great ambition to try to study more and to work hard than other students. Take a personal experience as an example, when I was in elementary school. One policy that the school used to encourage students to made more effort was, they asked parents to provide a gift when their children had great improvements in their school materials. I can remember I always tried to do my best so as to get more rewards.
The second reason that I hold this opinion is that it teaches children how to manage their money from an early age. In fact, parents will benefit children not only to their current life but also to their future. To put discussion into a wider context, consider a person who has learnt to how to organize their budget an early age, he will have less financial problems in the adulthood as he has practiced to spend his money wisely during childhood.
Taking into account all these factors, I should reinforce my perspective that it is good for parents to give their children money as a reward for getting high mark in school. Since, it provides them with opportunity to learn how to manage their money and stimulate them to make more efforts at doing their assignments and attaining high grade.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...n remember I always tried to do my best so as to get more rewards. The second reason ...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practiced spending'.
Suggestion: practiced spending
...ial problems in the adulthood as he has practiced to spend his money wisely during childhood. T...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'as to', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227040816327 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.168367346939 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0867346938776 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382653061224 0.046263068375 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0867346938776 0.0685040099705 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.112244897959 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0280612244898 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52034805392 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0586734693878 0.0309702414327 189% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0765306122449 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204081632653 0.0209618222197 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0229591836735 0.0139019557991 165% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2072.0 2387.08602151 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 408.028673835 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77158774373 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323119777159 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.24791086351 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175487465181 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.091922005571 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52034805392 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534818941504 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.2004951498 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1176470588 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4118993133 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.882352941 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.644075263715 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 45.9087334098 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.25217391304 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288479181771 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103739892026 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0574914065591 0.0752933317313 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.509044079048 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166457278434 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110176625875 0.114077575197 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050928267378 0.0781384742642 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.361276214163 0.336927656856 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.040568059804 0.067059652881 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19980284509 0.210909579961 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350365539744 0.0618886996521 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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