Some university think of concentrating their investments around academic activities like in library to become academically more successful. After all, a well equiped library can help students to become knowledgeable in specific areas where they will thrive in their professional tenure. Along with this, I believe that, good health, spontaneous group activity and a public face of the university is equally important which can be achieved by equal investment in the sports section.
First and foremost, in our life health is an important factor, which is neglected mostly in our everyday's business. I believe most of us need some professional help in this area, that can be achieved by an organizational effort. Hence proper arrangement of sports and regular tournaments will attract more people to games like Football, Volley Ball. These spontaneous physical activities will in turn keep studetns healthy and active eventually make successful in professional career. Take my high school life for example here. During my studies in a residential school, their compulsary evening sports session everyday made me habituated to a regular physical activity, which I am still continuing in the firm of physical exercise at office GYM till today. That really helps to remain fresh even after 8 hours of office.
I also believe, in play, group activities are critically valuable for professional career. Plays teaches us how to interact in a group and coordinate group activity. Like in Football and Volley Ball passing the ball in proper way is crucial for the win, this works the same way when big projects are done by multiple groups of people. Games like Football teaches how to defend the opponent even with lesser number of player, which resembles to the office teams where everyone is not equally capable. These situations tought me interesting management skill practically, which otherwise would have taken far more time to master. Obviously these intrinsic benefits of sports justify the investment equality.
Finally sports bring particular universities the fame which can be tough to gain otherwise. For example many universities in United States of America are known for their Soccer team, I know one of them to be the Notre Dem University. They are so popular that every year majority of alumni come to join the 6 days tournaments. This helped the university to remain connected to its alumni working in important positions and bring in more funds for mostly the research activity in science faculties. Furthermore, bright students are also attracted to this university for it's fame in sports.
Essentially, there is a good reason to invest equally in sports that can bring in both extrinsic and intrinsic benefits which, otherwise, may remain missing for the students' entire life. This is obvious that sports will bring them good physical health, increase logical development and most probably, a sports department having equal investment can bring in the fame which will attract future fellow students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'after all', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259047619048 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.131428571429 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118095238095 0.0866891130778 136% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0590476190476 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0438095238095 0.0685040099705 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118095238095 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0247619047619 0.0351676179071 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79858517702 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0304761904762 0.0309702414327 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0761904761905 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0247619047619 0.0209618222197 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0285714285714 0.0139019557991 206% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3019.0 2387.08602151 126% => OK
No of words: 480.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.28958333333 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.408333333333 0.338922669872 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.304166666667 0.251872472559 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2125 0.174417080927 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145833333333 0.112833075102 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79858517702 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54375 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 65.5984352774 59.2087087015 111% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8695652174 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9986304349 48.84282405 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.260869565 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8695652174 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 51.2862318841 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.71544715447 1.45489161554 118% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245330761746 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102654818957 0.103427244359 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0696373785071 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.465913504887 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152501494614 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932824990435 0.114077575197 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551458590609 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.352011794115 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0238135612089 0.067059652881 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174595050326 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614795433731 0.0618886996521 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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