The reading states that conditions on Venus makes it inhospitable for human and provide three reasons of support. On the other hand, the professor disagrees and says that even though maintaining stations on Venus would be challenging, it is possible. He refutes each author's reasons.
Initially, the reading says that atmospheric pressure on venus is 90 times extremer than the pressure at Earth's atmosphere and all constructions would be crushed. On the contrary, the professor says that instead of building stations on the Venus's surface, they could float in the Venus's atmosphere, in which the pressure is as great as the Earth's atmospheric pressure. Hence, no crushing would be occured.
Furthermore, the reading claims that there is no evidence of existing of water on the Venus's surface and oxygen amount is exteremly low, also lack of water vaporation cannot replace oxygen reduction. In contrast, the professor argues this notion by saying that there are carbon dioxide and solphoric asid in the Venus's atmosphere and scientists could make oxygen out of them, so the oxygen importing problem would be solved.
Last but not least, the reading states that the level of sunlight that reached the Venus's surface is really low, because most of them are reflected by carbon dioxide of the Venus's clouds. As a result, human can not produce their required electricity out of sunlight. However, the profesor says that these clouds are not very thick, so some sunlight can reach the Venus's surface and also scientists can utilize the reflection of sunlight to produce electricity.
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conditions on Venus makes it inhospitable
conditions on Venus make it inhospitable
Sentence: Hence, no crushing would be occured.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, the reading claims that there is no evidence of existing of water on the Venus's surface and oxygen amount is exteremly low, also lack of water vaporation cannot replace oxygen reduction.
Error: vaporation Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: exteremly Suggestion: extremely
Sentence: In contrast, the professor argues this notion by saying that there are carbon dioxide and solphoric asid in the Venus's atmosphere and scientists could make oxygen out of them, so the oxygen importing problem would be solved.
Error: asid Suggestion: said
Error: solphoric Suggestion: ?
Sentence: However, the profesor says that these clouds are not very thick, so some sunlight can reach the Venus's surface and also scientists can utilize the reflection of sunlight to produce electricity.
Error: profesor Suggestion: professor
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Category: Good Excellent
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