People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries
Nowadays, almost all of people travel to other areas. Traveling has considerable impact on people. Some people believe that they benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries; others disagree. I strongly believe that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries for two most important reasons that is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
The first reason is that they benefit in bussuniss. If people travel to foreign countries, they can understand a lot of things about trading. They learn a lot of new techniques that the other people use them. For example, last year my brother Mahdi, who study management in university, traveled to the United Stated. When he return to our own country, he said that he gain a lot new experience about import medicine equipment to our country. He started his company and after five years he is really successful. In fact, his company was developed from ten employments to one hundred employments. If he did not go to abroad, he could not set a successful company.
The second reason is that people can check up a lot of opportunities for working. Having more opportunities for working allows people to select the best one and it is more probable that they find a well-paid job. For example, two years ago I went to London, and I get to know with Maria, who has a business in London. We talked about our majors and our experiences. And she invited me to see his company. When I went there, I realize that I can work in his company because their works relate to my major study, Artificial Intelligence that is defines as any system that can learn automatically. Therefore, I have worked there for two years. It was very useful for me, because I gained some ecperiences. As you can see, if I did not travel there, I would not get to know with Maria and find a good job.
To sum up, I believe that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries than from traveling in their own country. Not only do they could benefit in bussines, but they also could check up more opportunities for finding a job. Traveling can open our minds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70320855615 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67346655715 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491978609626 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4124353455 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.2916666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5833333333 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42246678418 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12680484801 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.212154903078 0.0737576698707 288% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34974495328 0.150856017488 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.26071469882 0.0645574589148 404% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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