TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by vhb on Sat, 11/26/2016 - 07:37

There are certain considerations or factors which everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the future of the cars. I certainly agree that in twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side.

Firstly, it is more likely to save money. These days, all adults ought to work hard enough to make money for foods and clothes. In this circumstance, any money wasting is not reasonable and can cause a budget limitation. On this side, using cars would be very expensive because persons have to pay a lot of money for fuels, such as gas or gasoline, or maybe for car maintenance. In twenty years, by increasing rate of fuel price, it is crystal clear that people will prefer to replace cars with other solutions and transportation systems including buses or trains.

Furthermore, saving time is another noticeable reason. Nowadays, people who use cars waste a lot of time in car traffic. Sometimes, they have to dedicate long hours to look streets and find a parking place. Based on a research, which has been carried out by Society Department of Utah University, the population of the world will be doubled in twenty years. This overpopulation will convert traffic problem to a sophisticated and problematic issue. Reducing car usage can be one of the most prominent consequences.

Last but not least, modern technology is an additional justification that comes to mind. The world now changes swiftly and humankind experiences a huge advancement and improvement in different fields of science and engineering such as health caring and artificial intelligence. These practical and theoretical progresses in the area of the remote controls and communications can elaborate and boost the reduction of the car usage in the future. In fact, people utilize the cars mostly to go for shopping or possibly bring their children to school. But, in twenty years, people will have more tendencies to stay home and benefit from online shopping or marketing. Plus, remote education throughout internet can remove the necessity for travelling by cars.

Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that in twenty years, human will use fewer cars. Participation of money, time, and technology are three prime and conspicuous supports.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, so, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12433862434 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91537392316 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.239499039 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0454545455 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13636363636 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160348782533 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469795363283 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666446623209 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956956077487 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315928149578 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1874 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.958 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.84 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.76 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.262 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.024 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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Please let me know that are these two following pattern true or effective?

1) first pattern: (do not say Agree or Disagree)
Para 1: introduction. do not choice: agree or disagree
Para 2: reason 1 in positive direction
Para 3: reason 2 in negative direction
Para 4: Conclusion.

2) second patern: (saying agree or disgree + develop one paragraph for agree and one for disagree)
Para 1: introduction. choice: agree or disagree
Para 2: reason 1 in positive direction
Para 3: reason 2 in negative direction
Para 4: Conclusion.

This is not for TOEFL essays. Only IELTS users use those patterns. They can use both, there are no great difference.

For TOEFL independent essays, users in testbig are asked to use this one :

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

5 paragraphs with 3 arguments.