People Attend College Or University For Many Different Reasons (for Example, New Experiences, Career Preparation, Increased Knowledge). Why Do You Think People Attend College Or University? Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer.

Submitted by mervdmrc on Sat, 11/26/2016 - 13:53

Every person has their own motives to attend college or university, which are shaped by personal, social and economic circumstances. I personally believe that people attend university or college for several reasons; such as having a good job, learning knowledge about some specific fields, and getting new experiences.

To begin with, I believe that people get university education in order to find a prestigious job. In my country, having a university education is considered as a gateaway to a successful career. My own experience is a good example of this. I graduated from university and obtain a respected job in an engineering company. My sister did not attend university as she did not like to study. She graduated from high school. Whenever she had a job interview, she can`t take the job because companies were looking for a university degree.

In addition to the issue of obtaining a good job, people go to university to learn specific knowledge about some fields like law, medicine, science and so on. People can take these courses only in university. For example, if a person wants to be a doctor he/she must attend university. That is the only way to be what he/she wants to be.

Furthermore, attending to university helps students to gain new experiences. I think university means new people to meet, new things to live and lots of memories to collect.
I have lots of friends from university who I still meet and talk to each other. I never forget about the share house that I stayed with my two classmates. So, by going to university I benefited from lots of things, not only making friendship but also the experience of living as a student.

In considering the causes of attending university, I have explored reasons such as it offers a way of a good career, helps to learn some particular knowledge, and offers new experiences for students. These considerations lead me to think that attending to university is not a plus but a mandatory in highly competitive world.

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Independent TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 80, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ho I still meet and talk to each other. I never forget about the share house that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, still, for example, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92603550296 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96704263027 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51775147929 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8429202885 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.25 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326451593439 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946011987435 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726968981087 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178621502133 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745226426096 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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