Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
It is one of the controversial issues among people because it has an important effect on people's destiny. I completely agree with this claim that thriving people examine new and risky activities instead of just doing an ordinary one that they know them well.
First, doing these activities can help them to gain beneficial information. Maybe some people think that this choice; doing risky things, brings them a lot of problems. It is true, but these difficulties might be like a teacher for them because it shows them how to overcome the problems by becoming aware of their abilities and endurances. Actually, it makes them a strong person. Surely, they suffer hardness, but they gain the useful information that is generated from experiences that they obtain.
Second, they can achieve their goal by utilizing them. We have heard a lot of stories from a famous people such as Bill gate, Steven Jobs, and the others how to try very risky and dangerous things until they received to their purpose. All of them do not afraid from a result because they just concentrate on receiving their target. They know if they defeat in their activities, they do not miss anything. In fact, it is the first step of achievements. This idea helps them to become a successful person in their lives.
Third, it assist them to find their favorite job. The majority of the people after education try to find a job, and absolutely they do that job for the first time. Also, maybe that job being one of the haphazard jobs, but they know they must accept that. As I said before, they earn practical experiences. These experiences make them an expert person. Hence, the one advantage of adventure things is finding their suitable job that makes them a prosperous person.
Finally, some people think a conclusion of doing actions can be irrecoverable. They believe that it is better for the human doing things that they have sufficient knowledge about that because it is safe. However, I assert that the successful people are informative and skillful because they have done activities that bring them a lot of profits.
In conclusion, although some people acclaim that the disadvantages of this choice overweight its advantages, it directs them to their achievements by making them an inflexible person in front of problems.
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- tpo6 3
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- TPO-07 - Integrated Writing Task In an effort to encourage ecologically sustainable forestry practices, an international organization started issuing certifications to wood companies that meet high ecological standards by conserving resources and recyclin 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 11, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'assists'?
Suggestion: assists
...ssful person in their lives. Third, it assist them to find their favorite job. The ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, third, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93059125964 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65064864463 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506426735219 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5344652283 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3913043478 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9130434783 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258106233645 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838598563763 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674599459029 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151844313928 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679605236879 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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