The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
This letter from the editor concludes that to improve the business, the skateboarding must be prohibited in Central Plaza. The editors think that the skateboarding is misleading the people to buy other necessary and household things which are sold in the Central Plaza. They have also come to the conclusion that the amount of litter and vandalism has increased due to the same reason. As discussed below, the arguments suffers from several critical flaws and is therefore unpersuasive.
First of all, the survey is of past two years and it is not mentioned that from when the popularity of skateboarding has increased. The main thing is I do not understand the link or logic behind the decreasing of the business due to the increasing of the sell of the skateboard. The reason of the lower selling of the other items may be the decrease in the population of the city or the area. People might be leaving the city more and so there might be the drastic decrease in the business of Central Plaza. Or the people entering the city might be youth in more number who would be interested in the sport like skateboarding so the sell of skateboarding must be high.
The other reason for the decrease in the graph of the selling of other items might be, the change in the quality or the prizes which might not be afforded by the people of the city so they might buy the things from other stores. The inferior quality or high prizes are not accepted by any common person. This does not imply that the prizes of skateboards are also high but the people might choose to buy the skateboards as their own wish and demand. There is no reason for the lower business due to the skateboards.
Thirdly, the editor thinks that the reason for the increase in the amount of litter and vandalism in the Central Plaza is the increase in the usage of skateboards. It might be the absence of the workers who are cleaning the Plaza. How can the editor be so confident that skateboard users are necessarily increasing the dirt through the Plaza? There might be other people visiting the Plaza to increase the vandalism. This again cannot be the reason to prohibit the skateboarders in the Plaza.
So in conclusion, the assumptions made by the editor for the lower business are not convincing for the prohibition of skateboarders. In order for better business, the editor should think of other reasons about increasing the same. Due to the above arguments I think that the editors should not apply the rule which they made.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, so, therefore, third, thirdly, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70227272727 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.632205773 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386363636364 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6233043277 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5238095238 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219799959379 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825610996573 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730796061443 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14473910717 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891714984065 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.5979740519 79% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.