Nowadays, every time you turn on the TV, go to the movies or read a magazine and listen to radio programs, you will find more illicit activities of celebrities than good activities. However, do positive aspects of them outweigh their negative aspects? I am totally in favour of idea of celebrities having overall bad influence. In this essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples.
It is clear that, some celebrities have dangerous effect on teens interms of use and abuse of alcohol and drugs. What I mean by this is that, teens see these people partying, drinking alcohol or doing drugs, and they think they should too. Subsequently, this sends the message to teens that in order to have fun or be cool, you have to use these substances. Teens may begin to think that it is no big deal, and this can cause serious problems leading to and including drug and alcohol addictions, risk taking behaviours and even death.
Another the most common problems that occur are issues with self-esteem for teens, especially teen girls. When a teen girl flips through her favorite fashion magazine, she is inundated with pictures revolving around the erroneous belief that celebrities are perfect. The air-brushed pictures and pin-thin models can cause body images issues for teens. In trying to make themselves look like the pictures that they see, teens can cause real damage to their bodies. Working out too much or not eating enough can lead to an eating disorder, such as anorexia or bulimia.
Having said that, they have positive aspects too. There are actors who tend to lend charities, the top athletes who launch after school programs and so on. Take Salman Khan for instance. He is the superstar of Bollywood. He has enormous donations on various cancer charities. As a result of which, numerous cancer patients are able to fight against cancer and return to normal livelihood.
All in all, although there are worth admiration works like huge contributions to charities, being true inspirations for school students and so on. And shameful effects like excessive alcohol intake and drug misuse. I believe the negative impacts readily overcome any positives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, may, so, for instance, i mean, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04155124654 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57140415054 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634349030471 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2399922129 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7272727273 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4090909091 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22727272727 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124060249989 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271439600593 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326711027073 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595133647332 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442727207268 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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