many people are against training dolphins to perform in the circus because it may injure these animals.Do you agree or disagree? why?

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many people are against training dolphins to perform in the circus because it may injure these animals.Do you agree or disagree? why?

In my opinion, I do not think training dolphins to perform in circus is a good idea. First of all, dolphins may get hurt or injured during the training or performance. If they do, it will take a long time for them to recover. Serious injuries might be with them forever. Consequently, they would never be able to swim and enjoy their lives in the sea as well as others do. Secondly, dolphins might lose natural abilities of a sea creature as a result of training for a long period of time. When we do not need them anymore and bring them back to the sea, they may not realize their home. At that time, they are not dolphins anymore and cannot give births, which might reduce their survival chances. Last but not least, dolphins look miserable when being kept in pools and forced to follow routines every day. Even spectators like us feel sorry for them if we see scenes like that. To conclude, dolphins should not be trained by humans in the circus. Instead, they should stay forever in their home – the sea.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lose natural abilities of a sea creature as a result of training for a long perio...
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...ure as a result of training for a long period of time. When we do not need them anymore and b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 825.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43548387097 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24772980627 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645161290323 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6874904346 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.75 112.824112599 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.23603664747 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169811519141 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072358058856 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768381360225 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169811519141 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 13.2329268293 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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