The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Wr

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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The bar graph above demonstrates how much time people in Finland spend on making telephone calls via three ways local- landline, national and international landline and mobile in the unit of millions minutes from 1995 to 2004.
In general, most of the categories had the tendency to go up whereas only local- landline fluctuated over 9 years.
It can be seen from the chart that Finland people used mobiles, national and international landline more and more. Although in 1995, mobile were used by a small number of people, after 9 years this method experienced a soar, reaching a peak at nearly 10000 million minutes, and this figure almost ten times larger compared with the past. The same case happened to national and international landline. The number of minutes people used this had plummet from 6000 to 10000 million minutes in just nine years.
However, in 1995 there was a slight increase in the local- landline’s used time then as soon as reached to 17000 million minutes it plunged to 12000 million 3 years later. All in all after nearly a decade, the amount of time spending through local- landline actually remained the same in comparison with 1995 at 12000 million minutes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
.... Although in 1995, mobile were used by a small number of people, after 9 years this method exper...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'plummeted'.
Suggestion: plummeted
... number of minutes people used this had plummet from 6000 to 10000 million minutes in j...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'plummeted'.
Suggestion: plummeted
... number of minutes people used this had plummet from 6000 to 10000 million minutes in j...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, so, then, whereas, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 996.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9552238806 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58541853484 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587064676617 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8815485842 43.030603864 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181837631948 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795676775733 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673735958076 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109193255369 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781404101962 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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