It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighbourhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
There are two restaurants newly open in our area. It’s quite good and food quality is also good and. It took me 5 min to travel by walk from my house to restaurant. If the new restaurant will come to my neighbourhood, I will strongly oppose this plan for few important reasons.
First, new restaurant means more traffic near my house. Presently where I am living the roads are very narrow, and along the both side of roadway there are open drainage system. New restaurant means more traffic on the road and it may lead to accidents, because someone might fall into those open drainage system. Also there is no parking space available near my area and they might use our parking space, to their customer’s car parking. Then the question might arise where we park our own cars?
Second, new restaurant means many new people will come from different part of the city. Some might be drinkers as well. I had bad experience last week, when I was having my dinner at restaurant one boy over drink and suddenly he starting teasing to the girl next to him on the other table she was with her boyfriend. And this all leads to fighting and the girl was frightened because of all this experience. This might happen with my neighbourhood also that’s why I strongly oppose this plan.
Third, New restaurant means harms to our quite and calm life. For example, where I am living now the atmosphere is quite relax at night. We are having good sleep. But new restaurant means it will open up to midnight ant speakers will be on and ultimately it will disturb our sleep. Neighbourhood students will get disturbed due to the noise from the restaurant.
Conclusion, The new restaurant means its way to accidents, way to disturbance of quite night sleep, and its way to disturbance of good life atmosphere that’s why I strongly recommend everyone from my neighbourhood stand together in opposition of the opening of the new restaurent
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Sentence: Conclusion, The new restaurant means its way to accidents, way to disturbance of quite night sleep, and its way to disturbance of good life atmosphere that's why I strongly recommend everyone from my neighbourhood stand together in opposition of the opening of the new restaurent
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