You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make c

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The table above illustrates the market shares of producing notebook computer of eight companies in two consecutive years 2006 and 2007.
Overall, the market shares of most companies saw a slight increase and HP Company was in the first place in both years.
A closer look to the data reveals that in 2006, HP accounted for 31,4% of the total shares which was also the largest proportion compared to others seven and one year later, it continued to be at the top at the rate of 34%. However the largest growth occurred in Dell company;s shares by nearly 4 % from 16.6 to 20.2%. Yet in term of Toshiba's shares, the rising trend was less obvious with a minor increase of 1.1%.
On the other hand, four companies left saw a light go down while others category had the biggest reduction from 22.5% to 19.3%. Acer, Lenovo and Fujitsu declined to 10,7%; 6.2% ;2.3 % respectively. All in all, in 2007 HP still dominated the market shares and Fujitsu got the least one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ed to be at the top at the rate of 34%. However the largest growth occurred in Dell com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, look, so, still, while, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 795.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64912280702 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36423957926 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4599538911 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.375 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 5.23603664747 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168482558828 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710018006455 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825709335191 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117361784214 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859516236594 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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