35.The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. "The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dan

The author concludes that it is better to make a contract with Appian Roadways for paving all access road of the new shopping malls. The argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify this conclusion, the author reasons that after four years the paved route by Appian Roadways is in good condition but the road which Intentions Roadways has been paved 2 years ago has some damages.However, Scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that two roads have the same condition this is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. For example, the weather conditions play an important role in the life of a paved road, or the traffic conditions, heavy traffic lead to make damage on the surface of the road sooner.Hence the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly states that the 2 roads exactly have the same environment and traffic.
The author also claims that Appian Roadways purchased new machinery, therefore, it can pave in a high quality. this again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate any clear correlation between buying new machinery and building a long-lasting road. To illustrate further, the Good Intention Roadways also could use the same machinery. If the argument had provided evidence that shows technical specifics and compares the machines then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author notes that Appian Roadways hired a new quality control manager. However, the survey of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for author's opinion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions. For example, is hiring a new quality-control manager leads to having better quality? Without a convincing answer to this question, the reader is left with the impression that claims made by the author are not substantive.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable survey of the roads.Ultimately, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about what is reasons for making these differences between Route 110 and 40.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
...been paved 2 years ago has some damages.However, Scrutiny of the evidence reveals that ...
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Line 1, column 529, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion. First of all, the argumen...
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Suggestion: Hence
...amage on the surface of the road sooner.Hence the argument would have been much more ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...amage on the surface of the road sooner.Hence the argument would have been much more ...
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Suggestion: This
...erefore, it can pave in a high quality. this again is a weak and unsupported claim a...
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Suggestion: Ultimately
...y way of a reliable survey of the roads.Ultimately, to better evaluate the argument, it wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16103896104 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83254583456 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.161583011 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.466666667 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0721500708291 0.218282227539 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250286780532 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320220214443 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415154987309 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371445146301 0.0628817314937 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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