The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kiinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.Summerise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kiinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summerise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph emphasises consumption of fish and various types of meat. The vertical axis expresses grams of food per week per person while years, from 1979 till 2004, are demostrated by horizantal one.

There weren't differences between grams of beef and lamp, roughly 150 grams, for every person per week, however grams of chicken were 100 grams higher, grams of fish lower tham previous two foods in 1979. Grams of chicken per person rised till 2004 and reached approximetly 250, despite that statistic states grams of lamb decreased sharply to 50 grams untill 2004. Though survey estimates grams of fish stayed stable till 2004. There was dramatic fall of grams of beef per person per week from 1984 till 1989, then increased in 1994 and fell sharply again untill 2004 grams were nearly 100.

In conclusion, result demostrates that grams of fish per person per week stayed the same between 1979 and 2004, grams of chicken were higher, in spite of grams of lamb were lower than previous years, and statistic about beef showed flexible result every year till 2004.

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Sentence: The line graph emphasises consumption of fish and various types of meat.
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Sentence: There weren't differences between grams of beef and lamp, roughly 150 grams, for every person per week, however grams of chicken were 100 grams higher, grams of fish lower tham previous two foods in 1979.
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Sentence: Grams of chicken per person rised till 2004 and reached approximetly 250, despite that statistic states grams of lamb decreased sharply to 50 grams untill 2004.
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Sentence: There was dramatic fall of grams of beef per person per week from 1984 till 1989, then increased in 1994 and fell sharply again untill 2004 grams were nearly 100.
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Sentence: In conclusion, result demostrates that grams of fish per person per week stayed the same between 1979 and 2004, grams of chicken were higher, in spite of grams of lamb were lower than previous years, and statistic about beef showed flexible result every year till 2004.
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