TPO 28- integrated writing - Peary's trip to the North Pole
In the reading, the author claims that there are three legitimate explanations approve indeed Robert E. Peary – who was an illustrious explorer - did manage to get to the North Pole. However, finding all the ideas questionable and implausible, the lecturer thoroughly casts doubts on what is claimed in the text and present some evidence to the contrary.
At first, the author argues that a committee – including members of National geography Society - has substantiated that Robert E. Peary actually reached the North Pole by inspecting the Peary's records. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that although the committee approve this statement, there are two crucial points that should be taken into account. The first issue is that the committee was not impartial since not only had funded the committee the expenditure of the Peary's journey but also they were Peary's close friends. Another noticeable matter is that all the investigation process took merely 2 days, undoubtedly they could not have precisely perused such a brief, cursory examination. Therefore, the committee's comment is not dependable.
In addition, the reading passage holds the view that it was practicable for Peary to go to the North Pole in only 37 days since Tom Avery succeeded to do the same trip with similar facilities. On the other hand, the lecturer disputes the points by clarifying the fact that regardless of the same equipment, the circumstances entirely differentiate between the Peary's trip and Avery's Journey. Although both of sleds were alike, the weight of the load carrying on by them were varied. As a matter of fact, Avery did not have as much heavy a load as Peary because the Avery's food was dropped off by the airplane. Besides, so agreeable was the weather condition in the Avery's trip that it could distinguish his journey from the Peary's trike facing harsh climate. Thus Peary's could not have reached the North Pole in such a short time.
Finally, the author asserts the Peary's photographs from the North Pole validated his location by calculating the shadows and position of the sun by means of the photos. The lecturer though, dismisses it by pointing out that if images would have been shown the exact position of the sun, it had been have a high quality image of the shadows. In fact that not only did not take the Peary's rudimentary camera the pictures with decent quality but also the shadows become faded by passing the time. Moreover, the fuzzy weather deteriorated the situation and had adverse effect on the photographs taken by Peary. Therefore, these pictures cannot be considered as a reliable source to find the sun's position and affirm that they were taken in the North Pole.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... committees comment is not dependable. In addition, the reading passage holds t...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... the Pearys trike facing harsh climate. Thus Pearys could not have reached the North...
^^^^
Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...isses it by pointing out that if images would have been shown the exact position of the sun, it...
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Line 4, column 300, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... exact position of the sun, it had been have a high quality image of the shadows. In...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in fact, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1373.03311258 165% => OK
No of words: 452.0 270.72406181 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99778761062 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64568254468 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 145.348785872 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 419.366225166 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6538099119 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.95 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.494576341251 0.272083759551 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141329147823 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113136061103 0.0662205650399 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282583887152 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449981239468 0.0443174109184 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 63.6247240618 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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