Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Governments of different countries take different measures to reduce the health problems of their citizens. According to public choice they may like to facilitate sports activities. Others believe that different measures should be taken instead. What so ever, to me , an increase in sport facilities will help to accelerate the health condition as it increase their exercise rate, help to avoid cardiovascular diseases reduce stress and keep people away from smoking and drugs.
Due to modern technology we move our muscles less and do most of our job with computers. Outdoor games like football, cricket, and baseball bring huge muscular movement in the body of players which is another form of exercise. These high levels of physical activities help the person to burn excess food and prevent fatty deposition. Thus, People can avoid cardiovascular disease by playing these sports. Without increasing the fields and sports equipment public health cannot be improved. For example if a play ground is available for a kid then he might prefer to play outside ignoring video games or TV. Moreover many health specialists say that sports reduce stress and keep the younger children away from smoking and drugs. As a result overall health condition will improved if extra sport services are provided.
By improving one sector like games and sports may not be enough. Government should take other steps to get a healthy population. By arranging some awareness program people can be concern about many health issues. Authority should take good care of the consumer products that may cause diseases and disorder in human body. Chemical free food should be available in market. As a result public may avoid serious health problems
To conclude the idea I want to say that, if the authority want to see a great reduction in health problems in general people they must developed the sports facilities though other issues can be considered. People should have at least a play ground in their neighborhood so that they can have easy excess to the facility. By establishing sport yards the country may expect to have a healthier nation in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, at least, for example, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14326647564 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61438563431 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570200573066 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.1515819511 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.75 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238974432758 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679619198117 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548181404241 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147753578714 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137664471716 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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