Live performances are very interesting part of entertainment world. It connects public with them. When any live performance is organized there is lots of people come to enjoy and appreciate work of all the performers and organizers. I agree with the statement that live performances are more enjoyable that watching on a television.
Firstly, in a live performance there is a different kind of feeling and spirit in all the audience. Which create an ambiance for performer to do well. For example, when I was in a music concert and all of us were shouting in joy. Singer on the stage got more inspired and sung very nicely...
Secondly,attending live concerts which are sometimes for some noble causes, helps us to donate some charity through it's tickets. This makes us feel good, that we helped someone. For instance, an old lady near our house always visits to live performances organized for a cause. she also donate some extra money to those organisations who arrange all this concerts.
Thirdly, attending live performances helps to make new friend whom we met there. Concerts changes our mood after our daily schedule of job and other work. Going to a concert push us outside the home to do some outing with friend or family. Like, I went to a concert last week with my friends, it freshen up my mood and filled me with lost of energy.
In conclusion, Concerts are very enjoyable and entertaining events. Which helps us to change our mood, helps others in the form of charity and it makes new friends. So, it's best to go out and watch a show live, instead of sitting on a couch and gaining calories.
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Sentence: When any live performance is organized there is lots of people come to enjoy and appreciate work of all the performers and organizers.
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Sentence: Concerts changes our mood after our daily schedule of job and other work.
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Sentence: Going to a concert push us outside the home to do some outing with friend or family.
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Sentence: Like, I went to a concert last week with my friends, it freshen up my mood and filled me with lost of energy.
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Suggestion: Refer to it and freshen
Sentence: So, it's best to go out and watch a show live, instead of sitting on a couch and gaining calories.
Description: The fragment show live , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace show live with live show
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Suggestion: Refer to it's and best
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