Teenage children are innocent and it's their critical period of life to make right choices. With perfect guidance, care and encouragement they can make a right decision for their life. I agree with the statement that parents can help their teenage children to prepare for adult life by encouraging them to take a part-time job. This will help them to build their future. I believe in "No pain and no gain". If teenage kids adopt the habit of hard work, they never give up in their life and this will help them to get what they want from life.
In support of my statement my first reason is if teenage children take a part-time job, they will learn to save money. They save money to fulfill their future plan, to buy things they want to and also they started thinking to save money to become rich one day. For example, when I was a teen and on my part-time job, I saved $400 to buy a new bicycle. That was a great feeling when I bought a bicycle for myself.
Secondly, when a teenage take a part-time job, he starts earning in a small age. This helps to prepare for his adult life by understanding that spending money is much easier than earning. Teenage work on so many creative ideas to earn money. If they work under someone they work so hard to show their best and get appreciated by them. For instance, my neighbors once asked me to clear their lawn for $100. I worked my best and after that they appreciated my work and gave me $150 for that job.
Third reason is, a person can earn money by many ways but if he don't know how to control his expenses he can never save it. So children should learn how to get control over expenses. Because of part-time job they know the value of money and instead of being a prodigal they spend thoughtfully. For example, on my first day of part-time job I realized that earning $20 needs lots of hard work. After that I slow down also my shopping for things which are not needed or useless.
In summary, a part-time job teaches a teenage that how he/she can earn, manage and spend their money. This lesson will be with them throughout their life. This works as a foundation of their creativity, learning and social activity by dealing with people on their job. They give some value to money and become mature as they grow up.
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