Computer games are very popular in kids as well as in adults. I agree that computer games is a waste of time. Nowadays people gift their children computer games to play little bit with it to enjoy or to refresh their mood after study. But mostly children play computer games all day long and forgot about everything. So, children should not be allowed to play computer games.
Computer games are very interesting to play. They occupy your mind completely and makes you forget about other things. Children play this games all day and as a result they are occupied with obesity, antisocial behavior, eyeglasses and lack of interest in study. This all things affect their future and behavior.
Computer games reduces children's physical activity and makes them obese at a very young age. Which might affect their appearance and looks. He'll be boycotted by other kids and they might tease him as a 'fat boy'. This thing can push him into depression. He reduces social contact and became all alone.
If children spend more time on computer games, this will affect their studies and leads to poor results. They also experiences lack of concentration and difficulty in remembering any thing.
When I was in school, my parents gifted me a computer game because I got highest marks in my class. After that I used to play it all day long. After about one or two months I felt that I was looking fat. I've difficulty in concentration during studies. I've got eyeglasses of high number. My scores of next exam were very bad.
In conclusion, computer games is not bad if played for a limited period of time. Children should not be allowed to play it all day. There should be a specific time limitation for them to play these games. At the end I just want to say that, "Desires are fine but it should not be obsessive".
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