Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime.However, a more effective is to provide people a better education.Do you agree or disagree?
Although prisons are effectively considered to control illegalities, an improvement of education will bring social security as a means to eliminate the problem from its root.I disagree that education is the better one.In my point of view, both prison and education are equally important as ways for reducing crime.
The reasons why prisons are the necessity for social security are varied.Jail is a place where violent criminals are kept in order to ensure the safety of other citizens.Especially dangerous offenders such as murderers or robbers have to be imprisoned for their heinous actions.Furthermore, prison sentences not only act as a deterrent against crime but also stops delinquents re-offending as they are locked away.Meanwhile, these convicts would be deprived of their liberty and become isolated from their family and relatives.Therefore, this trend will give not only offenders the chance to reflect on their actions but also give them time to reform their behavior. On the other hand, prisons have become schools of crime.It means that jails will create opportunities for prisoners so as to learn kinds of offenses from other criminals; consequently, most of them reconsider committing crime after releasing from prison.They not only are not reformed but also continue to illegal activities in order to get money to live.Hence, prison can not be the only way to tackle crime rate.
Education serves as a remedy for the origin of crimes. Education in prison not only contributes greatly to enhance prisoners' knowledge but also will form a civilized society.By providing numerous vocational training and sports facilities for a long period of time, prisoners are engaged in doing various courses.For instance, we can establish several workshops for teaching technical skills such as plumbing, electric wiring which would lead to employment opportunities.They can also make sports teams for individuals who are interested in numerous fields like football or volleyball By participating in these classes and teams, they not only will gain knowledge of a skill but also will distract their attention from criminals matters.After finishing the courses, it is essential that they receive licenses which are valid in society.Moreover, the government should organize specific working environments for trained prisoners who are released from jail.This program will contribute to the reduction of crime figures.
In conclusion, it is quite obvious that is an initial punishment for each offender who commits an act of violence.Vocational training should be arranged by authorities in jails.As a result, imprisonment associated with education will improve social security.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58088235294 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30133047725 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563725490196 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 68.0 20.2975951904 335% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 295.27863489 49.4020404114 598% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 379.5 106.682146367 356% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 68.0 20.7667163134 327% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.0 7.06120827912 368% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125413401349 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666960781003 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643719143217 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802326030171 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595339477851 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.9 13.0946893788 297% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -14.47 50.2224549098 -29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.2 11.3001002004 285% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.27 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.89 8.58950901804 138% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.2 10.1190380762 289% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 33.0 10.7795591182 306% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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