Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?Use your own knowledge and experience and support your

Television existence is there from almost last more than fifty years. Nowadays, it is treated as an essential commodity by everybody in the society. TV has been playing an important role in the cultural development of the society, but at the same time negative influences are noticeable as well.
Various advantages and disadvantages are on cultural development of societies are there due to television .To begin with, across the world, television has immensely benefited the society tapping their hidden talents. In order to do this, TV runs regular shows and competitions in areas like music and academics and it has resulted in developing career paths for millions of people in both remote and urban areas which otherwise people’s talents would have lost somewhere. For example, recently a girl from a remote village in Rajasthan state, India, won IInd prize in one of the popular music show. Secondly, although there are several beneficial programs on TV, some of the popular ones are teaching how to stay fit and healthy and for that special Yoga class are shown. Moreover, several programs are shown on tourism with the goal to familiarize people with popular places in the country and world. Such programs are gaining popularity among public.
However, TV has also influenced the society in negative way. First of all, after watching famous stars in crime with purpose of getting rich and life threatening shows, several people aim to mimic such stunts in their real life but ended up in big trouble In recent time, in my country, India, several reports shows that several young people have tried to imitate such styles in their real life and ended in a big problem..
In conclusion, it is true that television will continue to have a positive significance in developing cultures of various societies. But, now in order to reduce the effect of negative influences on the society, television censor board must put strong measures in showing shows which may influence people in wrong way.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07272727273 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64301494649 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587878787879 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.1425536255 49.4020404114 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.769230769 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153064118188 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632426423092 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765363512012 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105256776028 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645474822483 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Relative clauses are clauses starting with the relative pronouns who*, that, which, whose, where, when. They are most often used to define or identify the noun that precedes them. Here are some examples:

Do you know the girl who started in grade 7 last week?

Can I have the pencil that I gave you this morning?

A notebook is a computer which can be carried around.

I won't eat in a restaurant whose cooks smoke.

I want to live in a place where there is lots to do.

Yesterday was a day when everything went wrong!

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Nominalizations are nouns that are created from adjectives (words that describe nouns) or verbs (action words). For example, “interference” is a nominalization of “interfere,” “decision” is a nominalization of “decide,” and “argument” is a nominalization of “argue.”

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You still have grammatical issues, like:
Various advantages and disadvantages are on cultural development of societies are there due to television

should be:
Various advantages and disadvantages on cultural development of societies are there due to television