Do you think that television programs, movies, and video games influence young people’s behavior?Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
I agree with this statement that young people are influenced by television programs, movies, and games. Young children particularly the age group of eight to seventeen in view is most vulnerable to learn of getting distracted through this ways. This age group are the most connected with this devices and often end up searching some thing unusual.
First, I would like to show a recent scenario of a game named "Blue Whale". This game has 50 tasks and with each task the toughness level increases and in the last task the one playing the game is asked to suicide. At first, the one thinks how can one suicide because of the game. But the increase in toughness and sequence of first few tasks brainwashes the child and at last, gets trapped. In some cases, children are black mailed or forced if they start the game. Also, the children in this age group develop the ability to hide things from the parent so parents also do not come to know until the end.
Secondly, the video games and the one with fighting like "contra" the most played game by children. I had a personal experince with this game. There is action in which bombs are thrown in this game. And when one day actually playing it with friends in garden, my friend actually threw a stone on me as a bomb, luck favored me and I was safe it didn't injured me. So video games like this influence the children actions in real.
Third, the content shown on internet is not controlled. And often children having an habit to explore and just use computer come against things that are not suitable for that age. Also the children become demanding for different things showed in advertisement. And not all parents can afford such things so in end leads to dispute and hatred between parents and children at a small age.
So in my view this programs and games not only influence the behaviour of young but can also lead to dissastorous results like the one in blue whale case. In all the only remedy, children cann't be restricted completely, so control with rules and regulation on this things is a must.
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- Integrated essay 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, in my view, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68834688347 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50072220237 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528455284553 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9506437709 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145598879515 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535360181318 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652759081292 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793016815217 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392601765922 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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