The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Bek on Fri, 08/25/2017 - 17:27

The table illustrates the band scores on average from diverse countries, namely Germany, France, Indonesia and Malaysia who took the IELTS General Test in 2010. Overall it is immediately apparent that German students demonstrated the largest result, while remaining three countries were fairly close to each other.

According to the table, it can be clearly observed that Germans displayed the highest outcome compared to other nationalities, showing their awareness in listening section by reaching 6.8. Whilst reminders' results were almost the alike, which were 6.3 out of 9. Despite the fact that the same trend remained almost steady in the following part, where occured a reading, Malays showed the highest band score in that area being the most readable by exceeding Germans.

However, Deutchland's test-takers retain their leading in writing, subsequently their talent and ability provide them to plateau at 6.6, whereas, in stark contrast to them, Malaysia's hit a low of merely 6.0. Surprisingly, their speaking skills were not as low as the previous sections. Germany, again, the highest, but French, Indonesian and Malay figures were comparable for this case as well (approximately 6.3).

In conclusion, as it is obvios German was the highest not merely by total, but also by sections. At the same time, relcuctants indicated an alike outcome in overall.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rench, Indonesian and Malay figures were comparable for this case as well approxi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, well, whereas, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 214.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40654205607 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72811166186 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 106.607317073 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.705607476636 0.547539520022 129% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1085568061 43.030603864 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.285714286 112.824112599 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5714285714 22.9334400587 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.23603664747 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125453373023 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595939216785 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825484034776 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715939732724 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742195837263 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.2329268293 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 61.2550243902 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.69 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.25 8.06136585366 140% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 40.7170731707 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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