Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a " Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim river from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The argument claims that woven baskets were believed to be made only by Palean people. However, the author assumes that it is a wrong statement because archaeologist discovered a "Palean" basket in another area where Paleans could not get as they needed a boat. The boat, however, was not found. So the writer makes a conclusion that these baskets were not made by only Palean people, which makes them not uniquely Palean. The argument may seem logical at first glance; however, the author fails to provide strong evidence, which causes to a groundless cause-effect reasoning.
To begin with, the author claims that firstly woven baskets were found only in the vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea; therefore, the baskets were believed to be made by the Palean citizens. This statement could have been correct; however, the writer never mentioned that archaeologists had already finished their research and come to a conclusion that it had been the only place where the baskets could have been found. Of course, the author writes later that the same baskets were found in another area. However, it is not enough to prove that the Palean people were not the only people who made such baskets. Moreover, it is possible that Palean people lived not only in the village of Palea but also in other places, which can explain why researchers found the baskets somewhere else. That's why the author's statement is rather doubtful. If the author had provided more information on the place Palen people had lived, and on scientists' research, his/her argument would have been more convincing.
Secondly, the author claims that ancient Paleans had no possibility to cross the river as there was no boat found. That is an unsupported assumption because many decades have passed; therefore, numerous events could have occurred. For instance, there could have happened a storm that may have destroyed boat. Or, maybe, the boat may be buried in the ground because the state of that place must have changed through ages. That's why the assumption that the boat has never existed is extreme because the writer never considers a possibility that the boat may have been crashed. If the author had provided relevant proof that there have been no storms during these ages, then his reasoning may have become convincing.
Finally, the author claims that the baskets were not uniquely Palean as they were found in another village, which was believed to be not Palean. This assumption could also have been correct; however, the author does not consider a scenario that Palen people could have sold their baskets to other nations. Maybe, people who lived in Lithos were Paleans trade partners. Then, this assumption can explain why the baskets were found in Lithos. If the author had proved that Palean people had had no relationship with Lithos citizens, his/her reasoning would have been way better.
In conclusion, it should be mentioned that the author's reasoning has several serious flaws that lead to unconvincing deductions despite his/her arguments seem convincing at first glance. The writer should provide more relevant information and add some essential details; otherwise, his/her argumentation will remain weak.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: That's
...chers found the baskets somewhere else. Thats why the authors statement is rather dou...
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Line 3, column 814, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e baskets somewhere else. Thats why the authors statement is rather doubtful. If the au...
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...t place must have changed through ages. Thats why the assumption that the boat has ne...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...he author had proved that Palean people had had no relationship with Lithos citizens, h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 29.0 13.6137724551 213% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 523.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16826003824 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52713304792 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416826003824 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1007276452 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.12 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.92 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.24 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354121235393 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115811008832 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901911321352 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201738328977 0.128457276422 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125090122675 0.0628817314937 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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