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Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
The number of museums that take money for entrance keeps growing in many countries. Although some doubt the benefits of the policy, I believe that merits beat drawbacks. Below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, there are those who criticize the trend. They point out that if people are forced to buy tickets, they will avoid paying visit to the place and the number of visitors will decrease. At the same time, there is no guarantee that allowing people inside for free will attract the same number of spectators from year to year. In fact, if museums administration is not interested in attracting new public, because they do not get any profit out of it, they may have been keeping the same exposition for ages; consequently, people will likely get bored with the same stuff demonstrated. Thus, it seems that the
number of visitors may be impacted by other factors than taking fee.
On the other hand, there are museums that sell tickets to public. The employees that work here are highly motivated to woo as much people as possible. Thus, there are new exhibitions of famous and well-known authors and artists who are invited to appeal the folk. Moreover, there is another benefit – museums are able to collect, perhaps, large amount of money that can be spent on renovation of buildings, exposition or buying new masterpieces. In other words, charging fee has auspicious effect on personnel’s motivation, development and maintenance of exposition and on public’s satisfaction.
To sum up, there are some possible drawbacks of the policy that may be caused by other factors; but there are some conspicuous benefits that have been discussed above that devaluate the plausible disadvantages.
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if museums administration is not interested in attracting new public, because they do not get any profit out of it, they may have been keeping the same exposition for ages;
if museums administration is not interested in attracting new public, they do not get any profit out of it, and they may have been keeping the same exposition for ages;
Sentence: To sum up, there are some possible drawbacks of the policy that may be caused by other factors; but there are some conspicuous benefits that have been discussed above that devaluate the plausible disadvantages.
Error: devaluate Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
Need to mention 'merits beat drawbacks' in the third paragraph and conclusion.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1415 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.975 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 622, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 6, column 127, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ork here are highly motivated to woo as much people as possible. Thus, there are new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, in fact, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04436860068 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78401659605 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576791808874 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.770172729 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.571428571 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173592077843 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538862231866 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532413812147 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076277185818 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430341672315 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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