Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in school and college.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.
Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in the industrialized society. In order to solve the problem, some people believe it should be banned the advertisements for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks and drinks. I agree this is one of the ways to tackle the problem. There are other solutions including increase people's awareness of the health issues resulted from childhood obesity, and education of people adopting healthy life style through eating and exercise.
Unhealthy eating habit is one of the reasons children nowadays are becoming overweight and obese. Fast food and too much candy and sugary drinks are to be blamed, because they are easily accessible from vending machine and cafeteria in school and college. Therefore, advertisements for these junky food should be banned in schools and college in oder to decrease the chances for consumption by young kids and students.
Banning adverts for unhealthy food is only part of the solution. Young kids and their parents should be educated about the health problems that obesity can get through media such as TV, radio and newspaper. Obesity can increase the risk for diabetes, hypertension and many types of cancer later in life.
Schools and college are also responsible for providing health meals in their cafeteria and vending machines. Many children and college students eat a least one meal at school during the day. If the school provides more healthier and balanced food, and eliminates junk food such as fries and burgers, then the students would be benefit from healthy food and less likely become overweight.
Reduce child hood obesity is a complicated issue and needs involvement of many parts, including kids themselves, parents, school authorities and the media.
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some people believe it should be banned the advertisements for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks
some people believe it should ban the advertisements for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks
or: the advertisements should be banned
If the school provides more healthier and balanced food //more and er are duplicated
If the school provides more healthy and balanced food
If the school provides much healthier and balanced food
then the students would be benefit from healthy food and less likely become overweight.
then the students would benefit from healthy food and less likely become overweight.
Reduce child hood obesity is a complicated issue
Reducing child hood obesity is a complicated issue
Sentence: Therefore, advertisements for these junky food should be banned in schools and college in oder to decrease the chances for consumption by young kids and students.
Error: oder Suggestion: order
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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //Double check grammar issues after essay writing.
No. of Words: 279 350 //We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1432 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.133 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.871 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... Many children and college students eat a least one meal at school during the day...
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Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... during the day. If the school provides more healthier and balanced food, and eliminates junk ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27956989247 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63844082218 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584229390681 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7399481541 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.214285714 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 7.06120827912 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267325635677 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907257389076 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682418497833 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136314945136 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815791743676 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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