04/10/2017
Team activities can teach more skills for life than other activities which are played alone.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many aver participation in activities that are done in groups can give more skills and experiences than taking part in events that are played alone. I disagree with this prospect and below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
On the other hand, participating in team activities provides the players with an opportunity to benefit. Firstly, humans are social animals and our predecessors lived in groups and this tradition is continuing nowadays. In fact, the ability to get on well with others is essential for being successful and efficient in a contemporary society. For an instance, playing such team sports as football, volleyball, basketball, hockey and baseball let young athletes learn how to communicate effectively and be a part of a larger system. Secondly being able to learn how to lead and submit to a will of a chief is another advantage that may be acquired while doing group activities. A young gamer could understand what role is more comfortable, convenient and appropriate for him and this experience will help the youngster to develop his personality in accordance with his natural inclinations and abilities. Those are several skills that are gotten through working with others.
On the other hand, doing some activities on your own develops a number of benevolent knacks as well. Primarily, a kid may build self-confidence. People’s opinions about themselves, their abilities and place in society are crucial determinants of human conduct and a child who get used to act on his own and to win without outside help will likely develop a strong belief in own strengths. This feeling could be an enormous merit that will allow him to become a prosperous and well-known individual in adulthood. Furthermore, playing and preparing for such sports activities as running on short and long distances, swimming as well playing chess or video games demand from young descendants to be able to organize themselves. This is a knack that is indispensable for studying, working and even having a family because a person who can organize life could get things done in time. Those traits are developed better in activities that are done without others.
To sum up, the belief team activities are more fruitful than those that are played alone appears to be rather unsound due to a wide variety of skills that are learned while playing without others.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1.Unique words percentage is low:
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.561755894193 97%
better to develop less content to have higher Unique words percentage. Around 300-350 words are enough.
2. 'that' is over used, like:
Many aver participation in activities that are done in groups can give more skills and experiences than taking part in events that are played alone.
revised:
Many aver participation in activities done in groups can give more skills and experiences than taking part in events played alone. //that is removed, or
Many aver participation in group activities gives more skills and experiences than taking part in events that are played alone.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1961 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.464 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09367088608 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89987374649 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1296078017 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.352941176 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229125635128 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714190971781 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659254015781 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16084769516 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045095631658 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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