07.10.2017
There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently.
Write a letter to the management of the public transport company. In your letter
-describe the problems
-explain how these problems are affecting the public
-suggest some changes that could be made
Dear Sir or Madame,
I am writing to complain about the poor service provided by your transport company.
I live in a South-West block of Springfield. Since a new mayor had been elected two months ago, the work of public transport has become questionable. Firstly, the number of buses that operate in my area has decreased from fifty to twenty; thus, bus stops are always full of commuters. In addition, a novel schedule has been introduced that shits time of the departure of the first passenger vehicle from 6:30 to 7:30.
Although those changes may appear to be insignificant they have a devastating impact on the well-being of local dwellers. Primarily, bus stops are always overcrowded and people have to queue for hours to get to their destination. Moreover, the buses are always out of schedule and it has become not reliable as well. Thus, it is difficult to use it. Finally, the new schedule turned lives of many into a nightmare because the majority of those who live in my block works in a Steel Plant and their working day starts at 7:30; They used to travel of the first bus but nowadays it has become impossible because when it arrived at our district it is already too late.
Those problems and their consequences may be addressed through several actions. Increasing number of buses or using vehicles that can get on board more commuters or introducing alternative means of transportation will make work of public transportation more convenient. Furthermore, returning to the old schedule will surely alleviate lives of Steel Plant's employees who live in my district. And punishing bus drivers for violating a schedule will make buses reliable again.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 288 250 //The second reason is too long. Make it shorter. It is hard to have 288 words in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 288 250
No. of Characters: 1382 1200
No. of Different Words: 172 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.774 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.889 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.034 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Dear Sir,
Dear Sir,
What should I change in my works to get high score regularly?
I mean that I can write two essays one after another and one will be scored well and the second will not
I understand that there is some problem with them. It is plausible that I do something wrong unknowingly.
I hope that I can help me figure out the root of the problem. I have one month left till the exam is held
Thank you.
The root of the problem is
The root of the problem is that the overall language still need to be improved. For example, grammar issues. Most time there are no any grammatical errors, however, they come up suddenly without notice. It is possible to remove all grammar errors or other language issues in one month? possibly not. So what can you do in the following days is doing the same thing you are doing nowadays: submit essays and get checked out. Try not to repeat mistakes in the second essays. Remember that other users have same issues like you, you just need to do better than them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...passenger vehicle from 6:30 to 7:30. Although those changes may appear to be insignif...
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Line 9, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... schedule will surely alleviate lives of Steel Plants employees who live in my di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 937.175257732 153% => OK
No of words: 285.0 206.0 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03157894737 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83239841183 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 127.690721649 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59649122807 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 290.88556701 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1007865495 44.8134815571 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 4.34317383033 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 1.49484536082 803% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110718990514 0.216113520407 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338416901313 0.0766984524023 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467437588801 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819746027128 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423490475758 0.0580467560999 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 41.2886597938 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.