Food can be produce cheaper if we use improved fertilizers and better machinery. However, some of method may be dangerous for human health and negative effect for local communities. What is your opinion?
Food is main necessary for human to get energy for their activity improved fertilizers and better machinery could be it produced cheaper. However, some of methods probably dangerous for human health and give negative effect for local citizen. I believe both of have good reason.
Producing food by machinery and improved fertilizers could increase production cost. Thus, producer could sell their product with cheaper price. Producer could create many product in once production in one time by them. For instance, instant noodle product in case plastic or cup sold cheaper because producer could production their product in once time. Producer get base material from farmer by cheaper price because producer buy much quantity. Besides, producer distribute their product to market in one travel. It decrease operational production. Decreasing production and operational cost reduce sold price in market.
Nevertheless, producing by mass quantity give negative effect for human health and citizen. Sometime, producer give additional chemical to their product for keeping fresh. Over number chemical in our body could make disease to people. For instance, instant noodle such as Indomie has preventative chemical that could make liver to work hard if people consume it product every day. Another additional chemical could make stroke in long time when people could control their drink and food.
In summary, use improve fertilizers and better machinery give negative and positive effect to human life. People should control their food and drink in daily activity.
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Sentence: Food is main necessary for human to get energy for their activity improved fertilizers and better machinery could be it produced cheaper.
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Sentence: I believe both of have good reason.
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Sentence: Producer could create many product in once production in one time by them.
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Sentence: For instance, instant noodle product in case plastic or cup sold cheaper because producer could production their product in once time.
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Sentence: Producer get base material from farmer by cheaper price because producer buy much quantity.
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Sentence: Besides, producer distribute their product to market in one travel.
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