it is. GOOD idea for student to work while they are in school
Parents look always for methods to prepare their for the adult life. One of the most controversial way is to push teenages to take a -time job. Some think that it can be hard for the teenages and it can break them instead of helping them. Others, think that it's the best way to prepare children for the adult life and they advance that pert- time job encourages teens to be more rensonpible. Personally, I think that pushing teenages to take a part-time job is a positive thing.
First, taking a part-time job is the only way that teenages can experiment ___ the real life and prepare them for adult life. Teenages are generally inside the parent's bubble. They dent touch the real life. For example they don't have to work hard to get money to buy what they would like. The only thing that they have to do is asking for the parent's generosity. Hence, they don't genearally value things correctly. As they will have to work hard, wake up early and sometimes leave the office late during a part-time job, they will, certainly, better value life and things. Even though some people might argue that a part- time job can break and harm these teenages, this will not happen if parents keep a close eyes to what their children do. Thus experimenting ___ a part-time job is crucial for teenages.
Second, a part-time job can financially help both parents and teenages. After the financial crisis many parents found themselves unemployed or they have sought a decrease in their salaries. In addition, teenages increase their depenses as they diversify their activities and start looking for universities. The parents start, then, getting a lot of troubles to come to the needs of their children, espacially when the family is composed of many teenages. Although, the money that teenages get from a part-time job is not huge, it's certainly better than not thing. Therefore, a part-time job can be very helpfull for both of parents and teenages.
In summary, a part-ime job is benefecial for the teenages as it's the only way to expriment the real life and can help them. financially.
- TPO INTEGRATED 48 66
- it is more enjoyable to have a job where you working three days every week or five days every week 66
- TPO INTEGRATED 49 61
- do you agree or disagree young adult are not helping their community 60
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: always look
Parents look always for methods to prepare their for the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...look always for methods to prepare their for the adult life. One of the most cont...
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Suggestion:
...ersial way is to push teenages to take a -time job. Some think that it can be har...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ead of helping them. Others, think that its the best way to prepare children for th...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t touch the real life. For example they dont have to work hard to get money to buy w...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... that they have to do is asking for the parents generosity. Hence, they dont genearally...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...for the parents generosity. Hence, they dont genearally value things correctly. As t...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...s get from a part-time job is not huge, its certainly better than not thing. Theref...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e job is benefecial for the teenages as its the only way to expriment the real life...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Financially
...riment the real life and can help them. financially.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77437325905 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52573254676 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481894150418 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6574848842 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.619047619 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0952380952 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131933613434 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554844516091 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527087657581 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872986241346 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447512446406 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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