Education and its importance in the society has undergone significant changes in the past decades and parents' attitude has also altered. Thus, it's crystal clear that they are more involved in their children's education. In my opinion, nowadays according to the importance of knowledge and education, it's every parent's wish to see that their children have achieved a high position in education and is prosperous and successful in his/her life. Now in the following article, I try to give reasons why I think so.
To begin with, in this modern day, parents are engulfed in their children’s life taking care more about them in all fields, not only education. The number of children in each house has decreased and while my father had 7 siblings, I just have two. That's a great deal and parents have more time to spend for each of the children. On the other side, schools want parents to participate in their children educational life, and that's a key factor. As a matter of fact, schools help parents in the process of controlling their offspring’s educations to be more involved, and the fewer number of children enables them to be more successful in this procedure of time-devoting. As a personal experience, I remember that when I was in the first year of elementary school, I didn't used to do my homework, and I just told lie to my mother about not having any homework to do. I thought she wouldn't understand, but one day my teacher called her, and asked my mother about the reason why I didn't do my homework. After that my mother was observing me strictly and I couldn't flee from doing homework. But it’s obvious that if I had another little baby sister crying, my mother didn’t have enough time to watch my work.
Moreover, contemporary education's importance has changed dramatically, and almost everyone knows that "knowledge is power". Whereas in the past, money making role of children was more notable and consequently children had to do jobs to make money. Nobody would think of going to school to study with a perspective of a job in mind. However, in this era, some parents even disagree with a part-time job for their children, and want them just to study their own lessons. Since nowadays better jobs require higher education, parents would rather their children study hard in order to find a well-paid job in the future. As my grandfather says, he had to work in a store with his father just when he was 12 and he didn't have any time to study for school material, although he was interested. On contrary, my brother and I are dependent on my father financially in the age of twenty or so, and my father always tells us not to worry about financial matters. He reminds us regularly that if we study hard enough, our effort won't be useless and we will be powerful with our education and job in a future that is not far.
To wrap it up, parents pay more attention to their children as their number has decreased, and they like to encourage them to study hard to find a good position when they got independent adults. These are the reasons why parents pay more attention to their children education in comparison to past decades that we didn't even have schools in every city or town. At least in my country, education and its place has changed as a way to get to a brighter future.
- TPO 49 - Integrated writing 60
- TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam 70
- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 70
- TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa 80
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... and parents attitude has also altered. Thus its crystal clear that they are more in...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I try to give reasons why I think so. To begin with, in this modern day, paren...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...father had 7 siblings, I just have two. Thats a great deal and parents have more time...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 393, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...in their children educational life, and thats a key factor. As a personal experience,...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 508, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... the first year of elementary school, I didnt used to do my homework, and I just told...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 622, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...aving any homework to do. I thought she wouldnt understand, but one day my teacher call...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 720, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... asked my mother about the reason why I dont do my homework. After that my mother wa...
^^^^
Line 2, column 794, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... mother was observing me strictly and I couldnt flee from doing homework. Moreove...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd I couldnt flee from doing homework. Moreover, nowadays educations importance...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... era, some parents even disagree with a part time job for their children, and want them j...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 652, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...h his father just when he was 12 and he didnt have any time to study for school mater...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... powerful in a future that is not far. To wrap it up, parents pay more attentio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r children as their number has decreased and they like to encourage them to study...
^^^
Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...n in comparison to past decades that we didnt have schools in every city or town. At ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, while, at least, i think, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62781186094 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6104148293 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486707566462 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5497333227 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.761904762 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266489665686 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904941651235 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579697631862 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1816429125 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198706221365 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.