15. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several
different jobs before they decide what job they should choose in the long term. Use reasons
and examples to support your position. (Model 1 A/D, generally one side of the issue is
discussed, similar to the Explanation type).
Selecting a proper job for rest of live is both very difficult and vital for live’s one because of that one try to opt carefully at the first time. While some people argue it has more benefits if a person undergoes varieties of career before choosing a real job for ever, others disagree. As far as I am concerned, the advantage of choosing a job outweigh disadvantage. To shed light why I have this view there are two main reasons, which should be discussed in the following essay.
Experience different jobs let to wasting times. To be more specific, when an individual wants to learn a job at the first place, he or she has to spend quit a few times until they become skilled and professnal . For instance, since I was in high school, I had a dream to become a doctor, but neither my father nor my mother were satiated. Thus, they persuade me to learn painter on the ground that both of them were painters. Although I spent a year to how to pic human shape, I never was able to pic anything. Then they forced me to learn new thing like designer, teaching, but I have continued my school and I have been following the job, which I was interested about it. If I have never wasted my time in the others, I am sure I was more skilled in the real job.
One of another reason why I am oppose of different jobs because that is too expensive. It is crystal clear that learning new jobs have a huge number of costs. Therefore, one should paying to the teacher or buying marital that she or he needs in that job. For example, as I mentioned above, I have undergone a great number of careers, not only did I wasted my time, but also I spent numerous money for them. Moreover, some of my classed were far from my home as result I went by taxi, metro, or buss that I had to pay money for them too.
The last not the list, learning various jobs take too much energy. Human being has a limit ability and energy. Consequently, when one expend quite a bit of time to learn a novel jobs, she or he is not in the mood and able to try learn new job. For example, one of my friends, Ali, very soon began to learn every kind of jobs to be sure he has different job in the future. After 5 year working in the various jobs not only did he not find real job, he was very tired to start learning new one.
To sum it up, with all into account, people have to think carefully and then concentrate on, which they are sure they love them. As a result, they can save their both time and money. Furthermore, they are more enthusiastic to take in rather than different jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 209, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...until they become skilled and professnal . For instance, since I was in high schoo...
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Line 4, column 479, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was never
...ent a year to how to pic human shape, I never was able to pic anything. Then they forced ...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'opposed'.
Suggestion: opposed
...al job. One of another reason why I am oppose of different jobs because that is too e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.22903885481 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35137468986 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496932515337 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7058779786 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1666666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194781584463 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625330992472 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382326339892 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121032874876 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02849529331 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.