05/11/2017
Nowadays many people are diagnosed with anorexia what do you think the causes of this are? What can be done to improve the situation?
Anorexia is seen by many like a plague of XXI century because a number of those who were diagnosed with the illness keeps growing steadily. Below possible causes of the trend and actions that can be done to fight it back will be discussed in details.
To begin with, many aver the main source of the problem is today’s society with its unrealistic standards of attractiveness that are being promoted by supermodels, singers and actors. Any person who watches movies or reads magazines may decide she or he is not beautiful or handsome enough and anorexia will be developed. Furthermore, some psychological and sociological studies demonstrate individuals may get anorexia in response to difficult or challenging situations. Experts claim when a person loses control over his or her life, developing anorexia may be perceived as a way to overcome the issue and get a feeling of being in charge. Those are several factors that contribute to the advancement of the trend.
However, the troublesome trend may be effectively addressed. Firstly, novel and more realistic standards of beauty must be designed and then imposed. If manufacturers of fashionable goods and expensive clothes hire normally built males and females, the understanding of what is attractive to the public will change and the viewers of the commercials and performances will not absorb unachievable standards of appearance. In fact, Germany, France, Spain, Italy and the United Kingdom have passed novel edicts that will regulate body size and weight of models that show clothes. Secondly, anorexia is a disease and if it is spotted early, it can be cured relatively quickly and cheaply. Thus, governments, public organizations and charities must focus their attention and effort on raising awareness of the public. The implementation of this idea may dramatically decrease the number of deaths from the illness. Those are possible actions that might alleviate the discussed issue.
To sum up, the mass media and advertising forge fantastic standards to sell promoted products. If the sellers are forced to lower their requirements to actions’ appearance and public’s awareness is increased, the trend may be stopped or even turned around.
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Essay evaluation report
because a number of those who were diagnosed with the illness keeps growing steadily.
because a number of those who were diagnosed with the illness keep growing steadily.
because the number of those who were diagnosed with the illness keeps growing steadily.
Any person who watches movies or reads magazines may decide she or he is not beautiful or handsome enough and anorexia will be developed.
Any person who watches movies or reads magazines may think she or he is not beautiful or handsome enough, and anorexia will be developed.
If the sellers are forced to lower their requirements to actions’ appearance and public’s awareness is increased, the trend may be stopped or even turned around.
If the sellers are forced to lower their requirements to actions’ appearance, and public’s awareness is increased, the trend may be stopped or even turned around.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1817 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.162 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.907 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.166 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04999740677 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605113636364 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0548927736 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.647058824 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174928820841 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481954622445 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465013511932 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105623831895 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650551680284 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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