In such a civilized society, in spite of different disagreements people have in various areas so far as one’s view goes, one point that virtually everybody approves is the importance of getting a job. This is mostly owing to the fact that it plays an important role in people’s lives because by having a job, they can survive and prepare a promising future for themselves. A broad range of controversial attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to which kind of job is appropriate for every person. Two sides often form in this regard. Those who trust that a job which every person attend should be more identical to their parent’s job. However, others believe the other side of this view. I personally consider myself among the first group. Among the many reasons one can give for this opinion, two conspicuous reasons will be elaborated through ensuing lines.
The first and prominent reason which comes to the mind is that children are more familiar with their parent’s jobs. It goes without saying that most of the children’s time is passed beside their parents and imitate their characters and personal behaviors. Take myself as an example, both of my parents were teachers and helped me during my studies by providing and explaining some lessons of schools for me. After graduation from the university, I chose my job as a school teacher. During the classes, I found myself more confident and used the same strategies which my parents thought me in the past. As a result, being familiar with a job gives us to become more productive.
Another equally imperative reason which deserves some words here is that in today’s sophisticated world, unemployment crisis is one of the most disasters that some of the countries are encountered with that. It is no secret that most of the governments give this opportunity for the children’s of individuals to be substituted for their parent’s job after retiring of their parents. For instance, in my country, every student has a great amount of anxiety regarding his/her career in the future and as a result, they are more interested to be replaced to their parent’s job. According to a reputable study conducted at the Sharif University of Technology, it was found that 67 percent of persons have got their parent’s job after passing some particular courses last year.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough to substantiate my view. Based on the given reasons above, I highly recommend that children should enter a job which is more analogous to their parent’s job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...risis is one of the most disasters that some of the countries are encountered with that. It...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, regarding, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07925407925 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95120545179 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4780328733 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.95 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38975121784 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127956652829 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114464549799 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268001957206 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044505046363 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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