Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?
There is an argue about whether or not we should spend too much attention and too many resources on protecting wild animals and birds. In my opinion, such attention and resources should be spent on more meaningful field.
Not all of animals need people protection. Great resources and effort should only be spent to protect those which stand near the brink of extinction like rhino, lion, cheetah,... Giving rare species of animals good protection is a good way to prevent the smuggling of animal body's parts like horn, bone or skin,... There are all so some downfalls of the effort to raise human's consciousness. For example, In 2012, PETA requested Ubisoft, a game company, to eliminate sea animal hunting missions in the game Assassin's Creed, Because they thought that It would be inappropriate to kill some sharks or whales in a game. While, PETA has killed thousand of stray dogs and cats due to the inability of taking care on of them at the same time.
Researchers has putted a vast resources on bringing back some extincted birds by DNA modification and of course. The question is that What is the point of bringing back these extincted birds and then we must spent money to devise plans to protect them and built up the suitable habitats. It would be wiser, If we can shift thoes resources to develop grand plans to coop with the increasing of population, to reasonable treatments for those who live in third world countries, to prevent the warming of the Earth.
In conclusion, only a slight amount of attention and resources is good for protecting animals and birds. What left should be spend on key fields.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
There is an argue about whether or not we should spend to...
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Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There is an argue about whether or not we should spend too much attention and ...
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Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... of extinction like rhino, lion, cheetah,... Giving rare species of animals good p...
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Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...imal bodys parts like horn, bone or skin,... There are all so some downfalls of th...
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Line 2, column 640, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...hales in a game. While, PETA has killed thousand of stray dogs and cats due to the inabi...
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Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'resource'?
Suggestion: resource
...me time. Researchers has putted a vast resources on bringing back some extincted birds b...
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Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
... animals and birds. What left should be spend on key fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, third, while, for example, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79285714286 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60725048702 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0293667716 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.230769231 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251652796393 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903606586609 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116849191156 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17341773718 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131925079793 0.056905535591 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.