The local council has decided to build a block of flats on the park opposite the place where you are livingWrite a letter to the editor of the local newspaper Where did you hear this news and your opinion The reason why you protest it Make suggestion

Submitted by rahul0910 on Mon, 02/12/2018 - 09:13

Dear Sir,

I'm writing this letter to bring to your notice the construction of flats in the park opposite my residence at 25, 3rd Street Avenue, Ohio. This is a peaceful establishment with an open ground for children to play and close to 50 families staying nearby that have access to it.

I came across this information from an acquaintance in the local council which is responsible for building the block of flats. I thank him for the useful heads-up but it had to be brought to your notice since this a matter of serious consideration.

Learning about this development took me by surprise as the place chosen for the construction is outrageous. Reason being, this park is the only place where the children staying around can spend their leisure time. Hence, construction of any sort will inhibit any source of fun for the kids particularly, that exist today.

Request you to publish this development in your esteemed newspaper so that it can be brought to the notice of higher authorities and can therefore, prevent the construction. Your support would be deeply appreciated.

Yours sincerely
Rahul Malhotra

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear Sir, Im writing this letter to bring to your no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 942.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03743315508 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86548196192 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657754010695 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1911128083 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201713780159 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688055563423 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493414262721 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104853182056 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104355524962 0.0580467560999 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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