The given chart show proportion of entering in different sectors graduate from Bluesky university in 2006.
The pie chart represents presentage of joining in various employment field who had completed graduation from Bluesky university in 2006.
It can be clearly seen that most graduates attained employment comparison other sector in Service industries with 33.0% ggraduates followed by Manufacturering industry and education sectors with 16.3% and 14.7% graduates , respectively . Furthermore , other fields offerd almost four time less (2.8%) jobs than politics sector.
The pie chart highlights the Art/ Entertainment/Media and Science/Technology were accounted work for 7.8% and 7.3% employment . Lastly ,3.6%, 0.3%, 0.1% jobs were provided by Civil service, Chanty and Sports sectors , respectively .
To conclude, maximum graduates were given jobs opportunities by Service industries sector however, minimum employment was offered by Sports sector to the graduates from Blue sky university in 2006.
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Sentence: It can be clearly seen that most graduates attained employment comparison other sector in Service industries with 33.0 ggraduates followed by Manufacturering industry and education sectors with 16.3 and 14.7 graduates , respectively .
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Sentence: Furthermore , other fields offerd almost four time less 2.8 jobs than politics sector.
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