Some people prefer to live in a small town. Other prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in?Use specific and details to support your answer.
Although living in big cities is attractive for many people, I prefer to live in a small town rather than a big city .
In spite of achieving to better life facilities and job possibilities, living in a big city seems so challenging; Having problems either noise or air pollutions look so overwhelming for a person who lives in a big city; Moreover, heavy traffic jam in certain times of a day becomes a trouble in wasting time in busy streets. In this way, I have had the same experience which repeats every day at certain times of the day. Wasting time behind the red lights sounds definite...
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