The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The Mayor is actively requesting an Automobile company to set up its manufacturing plant in his city in order to mollify the unemployment problem. He also offers significant tax incentives to the company in order to attract the company to the city of Hillview. Although the thought of the Mayor seems sagacious, there are many crucial considerations that the Mayor doesn't take into account before making such a recommendation.
First, the author believes that the Automobile Manufacturing plant will provide employment to substantial amount of people. However, the Mayor lacks vital key points while making such an assumption. What are the jobs that the company has to offer? Are the qualifications of the people of the Hillview city capable enough to get a job at the company? Will the new company be able to provide a fair remuneration to the people? There are many more questions which have to be answered before making such a recommendation. There has to be some background information about the company that can ensure that the new company will be fair and not exploit the desperate citizens of the unemployed city.
Second, the author does not provide any logical reason to believe that the Automobile plant would be successful. Although the City council will contribute to provide some incentives and benefits to the company, there is no reason to believe that the venture will turn out to be a success. Furthermore, the computer business was not successful; then what makes the Automobile Manufacturing plant likely to be a success? Are there any major buyers of cars and automobiles around the city? Is there any transportation facility to easily disseminate the manufactured cars? The Mayor doesn't seem to consider such questions but the company will surely do. Tax benefits and government support isn't entirely capable to successfully run a business.
Finally, the author elucidates that thousands of citizens are unemployed after the computer programming company was abandoned. This implies that the majority of the citizens worked as a computer programmer or in a computer related field. Hence, they would be uninterested and unqualified to work for an Automobile company. Why would the automobile company hire the people who are not qualified for the job?
Therefore, in conclusion, the recommendation of the Mayor, although beneficial, is implausible and lacking serious viewpoints. The Mayor needs to consider the above raised questions and evaluate whether the recommendation holds. He could also find other ways to develop the city; such as inviting a computer company rather than an automobile company and this time learn from the previous mistakes so that the venture does not fail again.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not correct exactly.
Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. //maybe not a perfect site. for example, there is a high crime rate.
condition 2:
The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. //maybe people are not qualified or reluctant to work in a new company.
condition 3:
I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing. //maybe 'tax incentives' alone is not good enough to attract the company.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2231 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.933 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.292 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.655 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.497 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y crucial considerations that the Mayor doesnt take into account before making such a ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...minate the manufactured cars? The Mayor doesnt seem to consider such questions but the...
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Line 5, column 687, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...do. Tax benefits and government support isnt entirely capable to successfully run a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24082568807 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99649358112 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483944954128 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5080934855 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2083333333 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148148235418 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462863680016 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494723341273 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929186462199 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056846144459 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.