There are many systems in my town that have to change to build a good city.If i have a chance to change one thing, i will prefer to change water supply and power supply.
Water is basic need for everyone so water supply system should be good.In my hometown water supply is not good.For many colonies, tap water is coming twice a week. This is not at all fair and for this i want to introduce more resources of water. I want to educate people in my city about how to utilize rain water and how can we reduce the waste of water. For example after washing clothes we can use that water to pour on plants. By motivating citizens by my ideas i will lead to build a city without water problem. And also i will take care of water purification system. Impure water affects health of many people and increasing diseases.
Second thing i want to change is power supply. Sometimes power availability is only for six hours which mostly affects the people who are doing agriculture. We can' t produce more power but we can change the power supply system. "How much should supply and to which areas and when to supply" By this we can make a good power supply.
In summer, i will cut off the current in morning times only because it will be horrible if current is not there in afternoon.In winter, anyways there will be reduced use of power because of cool temperature.So i will order to supply more power to the field areas so that they can benefit and it will not affect other people also.
By this way i want to change my city.It will be more satisfying for me to modify this things in my hometown as a citizen.
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Sentence: By this way i want to change my city.It will be more satisfying for me to modify this things in my hometown as a citizen.
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