Some people think that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others,however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should be taken into account when deciding on punishment.
In my opinion, the conditions of individual crimes, and the motivation for committing it must be considered then deciding on the punishment for several reasons. When criminal was drunk at that moment or forced to drink alcohol by someone, one will lost his consciousness and do not even know what is he doing. Additionally, if the criminal is under the age of 18 and do not fully provided with article of laws it should also be taken into account.
Firstly, when person who committed a crime is under the pressure of someone who made him/her drink alcohol or other drugs, that criminal must be considered a victim. Since criminal did not intend to hurt someone with his/her willing. For example, believe it or not Mongolia is famous for its suicide among the teenagers. Our country has ranked in 3rd place with its suicide attempt which has been done by youngsters. However, our police force is so narrow-minded and do not even research the reason why they do that. Hence, I found out that when adolescents drunk they tend to force someone to do something brave and thing that can illustrate who you are. Therefore, teenagers attempt a suicide under the force of someone who has lost his/her consciousness.
Secondly, if criminals are under the age of 18 they should be considered as a person who cannot take the responsibility in front of law. Therefore, there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime as a juvenile criminals. For instance, recently I have watched a TV news which discussed about the juvenile crime and it said that the children who stole a loaf of bread was sentenced to 10 years which can be considerable negative impact on their future lives.
In conclusion, law is an elaborate and complicated thing. However, all we know is we cannot affect to the people's right. Additionally, we should not leave serious cases blank and must research them further to intercept and decrease crime rates.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...d to drink alcohol by someone, one will lost his consciousness and do not even know ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t criminal must be considered a victim. Since criminal did not intend to hurt someone...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criminal'?
Suggestion: criminal
...nt for each type of crime as a juvenile criminals. For instance, recently I have watched ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82424242424 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74335996091 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7583791038 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298020607245 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09533430713 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112805215985 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17944322272 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817777072442 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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