Knowing about history of own country is really important but it is not a logical reason for avoiding or don’t pay attention to know about world history. In my opinion schoolchildren should know about both kinds of histories.
In my point of view, knowing about local history and learning that helps student to know themselves better. For instance students at their ages, when they need something to discover their own origin or ancestors, learning local history has an important role for them. They try to find something to help them to proud themselves and their birth place at this critical age, Therefore it not only helps them to know their root better, but it also is their responsibility. I suppose knowing about history of own country is one of the most important duty of every schoolchildren to play a better role for own country future. In other words, Students should learn about local history and also decide to be a useful person for own country and continue father’s way. For example when student know about historical wars, know Hero’s, their personality, goals for country and other valuable matter, they treat more as a responsible person on future.
On the other hand, this day and age, with considering that the world alters to a global village and boards of countries are meaningless, thus I believe every citizens should know about world history for successes and finding the solutions for mankind’s problems. These days there are lots of problems that any specialists over the world are invited to some congress to solve them. Therefore it needs to have communication with each person or each country. In fact knowing the history of world, wars, politics that are cause of history and so on, helps scientists and specialists to have better communicate and respect to others and try to solve problems.
In conclusion, knowing just about own country history isn’t enough, and it will complete and be useful if schoolchildren know about world history too.
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- TPO-12 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 73
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05438066465 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75467078496 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489425981873 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8016243377 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.692307692 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254641513005 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11216995086 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654823649308 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17918097642 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322192195992 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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