Success is a very important part of our lives. All people want to succeed in their life, because they want to acquire large house and luxury car and provide for their children good education. People apply different strategies to achieve their goals. Some people believe that for succeed in life human need to do only what she knows how to do; others disagree. Even though some people might find constant work more important aspect because it is more stable and less risk-taking. In my view, people who try new things are more likely to succeed in life for two important reasons.
The main reason is that you will be able to find more opportunities. Everyone are able to join to a different projects and get helpful experience and benefits form it. For example, last year I was interested in astronomy, I went to the university in my hometown to find research that I could make on my own or with professor's assistance. I had the project about high energy cosmic rays this is an elementary charged particle such as electron or proton, that has enormous energy, more than energy achieved at The Large Hadron Collider. My work involved translating international researches, analyzing them and modification existing theories. After I finish my work, my supervisor and I published our work. Some scientists get interested in my studying and invited me to study and work the same subject in Switzerland. As you can see, if you try new things you are more likely to succeed.
Another important reason you can start your own business. Entrepreneurial people are usually risk-takers because they do not afraid to lose all, and some of them succeed. For instance, my friend, Vladimir, opened small Chinese restaurant. He spends a lot of money decorating and advertising restaurant. He wasted almost all his money he even wanted to stop his business, but suddenly it started grow up. Now he has a many restaurants around my country. His dream is to proliferate to neighbor countries such as Poland or Belarus. This experience taught me that people who risk might succeed in life very well.
In sun people who are risk-takers and do not afraid to lose all their wealth are more likely to succeed. Not only because they could grab different opportunities but also they could start their own business that one day might take up.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...le to find more opportunities. Everyone are able to join to a different projects an...
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Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to join to a different projects and get helpful experience and benefits form it....
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Line 7, column 15, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ed in life very well. In sun people who are risk-takers and do not afraid to lose a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86616161616 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7118943061 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54797979798 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.13227108 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2916666667 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180487623894 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499046200889 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061612256363 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114577222688 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386407171067 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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