In the eighteen to twenty year age bracket the percentage was as high as 70%. A large contributing factor to this high level of addiction is attributed to the uncensored TV advertising of cigarettes.
For this reason all cigarette advertising should be banned.
Research found that nicotine addiction in young people is caused by uncensored TV advertising and society is finding the way to stop it. I agree that all cigarette advertising should be prohibited from all media. However, advertising is not the only significant cause of smoking in young age.
Advertising of cigarettes in various media platforms such as TV, websites, and billboards should be censored or banned from juveniles. There are many reasons to support this idea. First, young people are not always monitored by their parents or teachers. For example, they could watch TV or walk into the places where cigarette advertising is appearing. At that moment, the guidance from parents or teachers is not there to instruct them about those advertising in every chance. Second, advertising of cigarettes may lead to the starting point of nicotine addiction among groups of youngsters, if the presenters are their favorite stars. This is because young people usually have their role models or icons to follow their style and activities, in which smoking could be one of them.
Other factors which profoundly lead to smoking addiction in children are content in the movies or TV series and family members who smoke. Young people sometimes could not differentiate between what is right or wrong from the content in the movies or TV series. For example, a protagonist in the action movies they watch may save the world from villains which is an appropriate content. However, there could be a scene where the protagonist is smoking and children want to try it because of that person is already their role model. The other cause of smoking in young age is family members who smoke. This is the difficult problem to solve as children could not choose what kind of family they want to be in. When they are grown up in the smoking family, it is undeniable that children may see smoking as a common activity, which easily leads to a tryout.
In conclusion, I agree that society should ban advertising of cigarette in media in regards to smoking in young age. Nevertheless, there are other significant factors which could trigger the habit of nicotine addiction in adolescents such as movies' content and smoking family members which people should also aware and find solutions to solve these problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... the places where cigarette advertising is appearing. At that moment, the guidance from pare...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...d ban advertising of cigarette in media in regards to smoking in young age. Nevertheless, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01305483029 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65160282709 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454308093995 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1192739847 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.052631579 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202574459286 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776682607515 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583720397802 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152562169914 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680123371163 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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