1 Pool of Argument Essays Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people

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1. Pool of Argument Essays: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and
explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Submitted by Saharnaz on Sun, 01/01/2017 - 15:37

This argument discusses that the woven baskets, that once found near Palea, were not uniquely prepared in the village of Palea because the baskets were found in another independent village as well. Although this argument provides some evidence to support the idea, there are some holes that brings up controversial matters.

First of all, the author explains his idea by assuming that the two villages did not have any communications to take the baskets from Palea to Lithos since no traces of the boats used by Palean people were found. Not finding any boats in Palea is not a strong reason for lack of transportation between Lithos and Palea. Lack of vestiges of boats can be explained by many reasons: There might have been some other ways to travel between Lithos and Palea. For example, people from Lithos had their own boats and Lithosean boats transported the baskets to Lithos. Another explanation can be a bridge over the river. Moreover, the boats could have been rotten during the time because they were wooden. To strengthen the argument, the author should add information about the other possible ways of transportation.

Furthermore, the author mentions another reason to reject the idea of commuting between Palea and Lithos over the river. He states that the river is very deep and broad which makes it impossible for Palean people to travel without any boats. As explained in the previous paragraph, there might have been some other instruments to cross the river. Additionally, the river might have been shallow at the time. Changes at the climate is a common event that happened a lot in the earth's history. Hence, any variation in the depth of the river is possible. Therefore, the arguer should provide some information about the climate and stream of river at that time to improve the argument.

Assuming that the two villages did not have any relationship to transfer the woven baskets, the same pattern used to weave the baskets makes the idea of independent preparing of the baskets dubious. It is unbelievable to weave the baskets with a particular distinctive pattern at the same time but in two different places. What is not mentioned is the passage is the ways of conveying the baskets without any involvement of human, such as wind or river current. However, the writer can support his idea by providing information about the traces of tools and sources used to weave the baskets at two villages. For example, some reeds and plants used in some ancient crafts are indigenous to specific places.

To wrap it up, the skeptical issues in the passage related to the rejection of the relationship between Palea and Lithos weaken the argument. Nonetheless, adding some information about different methods of communication - including bridges, boats in other places rather than Palea - and existing conditions at the moment - such as climate conditions - will improve the argument to a more plausible one. In addition, comparing the pattern of woven baskets in different places or the sources used to weave them will provide useful information to accept or reject the assumptions in the passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...common event that happened a lot in the earths history. Hence, any variation in the de...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, for example, in addition, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2610.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04835589942 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66590319321 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42746615087 0.468620217663 91% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3040581255 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5416666667 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215657990862 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650707492113 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630123212319 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126505448718 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381781401586 0.0628817314937 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Chars per words: 5.04835589942 5.12650576532 98% => OK

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