In the argument, the author concludes that Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do. The author comes to this conlusion based on the presumes of both cities same number of residents but Parson City’s double spent for its public schools. Though the authors assumptions might prove to be valid, as it stands now, the author should give evidence for the two unwarranted assumptions for its persuasiveness.
The author assumes that there is a casual relationship between the money spent for the education and value of good education. This might not be the case. Perhaps there are only a few amount of schools in Parson City corresponding to its population and these schools are not sufficient for the residents. As a reason, Parson City recently spent money for building new schools. In addition, the school buildings might not properly developed and that’s why Parson City invested double money to rebuild these schools. If either of the scenario is true, then the author’s conclusion might be significantly weakened.
Furthermore, the author assumes that both city’s education quality is same. However, that might not be the case. Perhaps the Blue City’s education quality is higher than the Parson City and that’s why Parson City invested twice as much per year as Blue City in order to improve the education quality. If it is true than the author’s conclusion might not hold water.
To conclude, the author’s central claim might be true, but as it stands now, the author need to provide evidence for the following alternate for the persuasiveness of the argument.
- In our region of Trillura the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend the city run public schools comes from taxes that each city government collects The region s cities differ however in the budgetary priority they give to public 10
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 83
- We recommend that Grove College preserve its century old tradition of all female education rather than admit men into its programs It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation arguing that it would encourage more students to 50
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of city run local newspaper In our region of Trillura the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend the city run public schools comes from taxes that each city government collects The 60
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 83
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'few amounts'.
Suggestion: few amounts
...t be the case. Perhaps there are only a few amount of schools in Parson City corresponding...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
... the case. Perhaps there are only a few amount of schools in Parson City corresponding...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...order to improve the education quality. If it is true than the author’s conclusion...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 55.5748502994 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 272.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10661764706 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72991000381 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452205882353 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.2605813912 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2142857143 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24011444241 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978657530408 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933899135848 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154581180709 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08010776497 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'few amounts'.
Suggestion: few amounts
...t be the case. Perhaps there are only a few amount of schools in Parson City corresponding...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
... the case. Perhaps there are only a few amount of schools in Parson City corresponding...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...order to improve the education quality. If it is true than the author’s conclusion...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 55.5748502994 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 272.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10661764706 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72991000381 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452205882353 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.2605813912 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2142857143 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24011444241 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978657530408 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933899135848 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154581180709 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08010776497 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.