62) The following appeared in a memo from the director of a large group of hospitals.
In a laboratory study of liquid antibacterial hand soaps, a concentrated solution of UltraClean produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During a subsequent test of UltraClean at our hospital in Workby, that hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection than did any of the other hospitals in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout our hospital system.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the memon, the author suggests that the hospitals should supply UltraClean hand soaps because it can be used to inhibit patient infections. To support the argument, the author points out that UltraClean does a better in bacteria reduction compared to the current liquid hand soaps, and the test at the hospital in Workby is convincing. However, there are a number of unsubstantiated assumptions that need to be address before the decision-maker at the hospital could accept or reject the proposal.
In the process of reasoing, the author assumes that the positive test result at the hospital in Workby could be equally applied to all other hospitals. However, the conditions of the hospitals might not be similar enough and comparable. For example, maybe the original hand soaps supplied at the hospital in Workby suffer from severe contamination, thus it was not functioning well previously. Or, maybe the patients in that hospital are highly sensitive to even tiny amount of bacteria because they are infected by a certain disease. Without ruling out these factors, the author could not draw the conclusion that the result in other hospitals, if current hand soaps are replaced with UltraClean one, would be as comparable as the result in Workby.
Another assumption hidden behind the argument is that the hand soaps are responsible for the serious patient infections. However, we find no concrete evidence to substantiate the inevitable realtionship between the hand soaps and infections. For example, it is true that the UltraClean hand soaps do yield a significant improvement in bacteria reduction, but the original hand soaps might also do a good job that is execellent enough to pass the qualification regarding bacteria population limitation. In this case, the serious patient infections are less likely to be related to the hand soaps. Before comparing the quality of the hand soaps with the criteria of the industry, the author could not link the relationship between the hand soaps and the infections.
Last but not least, one more assumption that is also vital to the argument is that the UltraClean hand soaps could be supplied throught the whole hospital group. However, the author does not provide supporting evidence to reinforce the feasibility. For example, maybe the company producing that hand soaps has limited production capacity and thus it is unable to supply to all the hospitals in the group if they demand too much. Or, the hosptial group is short of budgets currently, and the management team would like to spend the budgets on other affairs such as improving the equipments or marketing compains. Unless the author could support the feasibility of supplying the hand soaps, the conclusion that it is possible to supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations is untenable.
In conclusion, even though the author proposes a potential beneficial plan to reduce the bacteria pupulation and further prevent patient infections, he or she should provide supporting evidence to address the assumptions above. These pieces of evidence include, but are not limited to, whether the test result in Workby can be applied to other hospitals, the relationship between hand soaps and infections, and feasibility of supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the memon, the author suggests that the hospitals should supply UltraClean hand soaps because it can be used to inhibit patient infections.
Error: memon Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In the process of reasoing, the author assumes that the positive test result at the hospital in Workby could be equally applied to all other hospitals.
Error: reasoing Suggestion: reasoning
Sentence: However, we find no concrete evidence to substantiate the inevitable realtionship between the hand soaps and infections.
Error: realtionship Suggestion: relationship
Sentence: For example, it is true that the UltraClean hand soaps do yield a significant improvement in bacteria reduction, but the original hand soaps might also do a good job that is execellent enough to pass the qualification regarding bacteria population limitation.
Error: execellent Suggestion: excellent
Sentence: Last but not least, one more assumption that is also vital to the argument is that the UltraClean hand soaps could be supplied throught the whole hospital group.
Error: throught Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Or, the hosptial group is short of budgets currently, and the management team would like to spend the budgets on other affairs such as improving the equipments or marketing compains.
Error: hosptial Suggestion: hospital
Error: compains Suggestion: complains
Sentence: Unless the author could support the feasibility of supplying the hand soaps, the conclusion that it is possible to supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations is untenable.
Error: hand-washing Suggestion: hand washing
Sentence: In conclusion, even though the author proposes a potential beneficial plan to reduce the bacteria pupulation and further prevent patient infections, he or she should provide supporting evidence to address the assumptions above.
Error: pupulation Suggestion: population
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flaws:
some duplicated arguments.
also need to argue:
In a laboratory study of liquid antibacterial hand soaps, a concentrated solution of UltraClean produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 525 350
No. of Characters: 2703 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.787 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.149 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.799 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 211 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2768.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 525.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27238095238 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88849214091 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424761904762 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 842.4 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1542054238 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.4 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133113527401 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484797807953 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370752799045 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876358311428 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017988848862 0.0628817314937 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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